A series of brutal murders began with ties to an unnatural being able to kill with startling ease. Ponies have gotten glempses of them, different monsters. Eris comes up with a plan, ask something with in-depth knowledge of the creatures, a human.
I got a problem with this story. Despite being a Human Teen, who is a total expert on "Myth" Monsters and such. A perfect professional on killing the murdering Monsters. But, what the HECK is his problem????!!!!!
At first, I'm glad he got a big pair of balls, and teach those stupid xenophobic Noble Pony idiots a lesson. And scare the Crap out of them with our Guns and weaponry.
But, WTF was he thinking on trying to kill himself, by provoking that guard like that. I get that the guard is very WEAK willed and will never kill and all. But to me, it sounds like the Guy is very suicidal prone, or doesn't care of his well being. That sounds really F***** UP dude!!
Plus, he even know, and talk about the concept And differences between Pyschopaths, and Sociopaths. And make it sound like HE is one on them!!!! I mean, are you making the Human character to be very edgy, or has F***** Up MENTAL issues??!!
Because, I can't BELIEVE he will have the capacity to be a emotionless, heartless, killing machine. Like a Hitman or something. Also, it won't help him to befriend the GOOD and NICE Ponies like the Princesses, Main Six, and the rest. Because he is starting to sound like a total Asshole, and "not well In the head" trigger happy cuckoo head. Plus, it will make EVEN Discord and Eris thinking they made a BIG mistake, and for getting the WRONG guy!!!???
I don't want that to happen to Him. I STILL want him to be a Badass, and don't take total Crap from the stupid nobles. But, I don't want him to be TOO Edgy, and sound like a Asshole himself.
10218823 That was actually what I was going for. or someone with Multiple Personality Disorder. Making him edgy was a complete accident. However, I wanted them to think that they fucked up before he gets the job done.
10218842 Oh ok. Im NOT against edgy Anti Heroes and all. But, it's just he doesn't sound like someone with that mindset. I mean, he is not like a Hitman, Assassin, Soldier, Super powered Anti hero, or a one man army type of guy. Or even the GTA Characters like Trevor and others.
Plus, he is making his life in Equestria worse, by being a jerk to the Princesses. I get that the Nobles are idiots and they deserve to get punch really hard!!!!! But, he doesn't have to be a dick to the Princesses and Eris that send him here in the FIRST place. If they were OOC like the other Fanfics, came in as total jerks or Xenophobic themselves, that's a DIFFERENT story. But in here, there are trying to be nice and want to find a solution to the Murdering Monsters.
But, him acting like that to the GOOD and NICE versions of the Princesses and others. That sounds very rude, and a dickish move on his part.
10218875 It's alright, I'm not even mad or anything. I like the story so far. Just a bit unnerved on his attitude. He just got to Equestria, and he ALREADY started to get in trouble and make him act he is a bad guy (In the Ponies eyes.).
10218867 well ... almost everything that the DOOM friend said covers almost all my question, although there are certain things that can be rescued, such as the part of not being trampled by anyone, after all THEY were they called/summon? to him in the first place. second the part where the noble says:
"A monkey like you could ever lay a hand on me. If you haven't noticed, you are the smallest and the weakest looking in the room." I looked around and, sure enough, I was the shortest with the shortest of them being two feet taller than me.
that part too mmm. It could develop differently, you know being annoyed by his attitude but responding respectfully. Something like:
looking seriously in the eyes "never judge a book for its coverage, the fact that being called to this place reflects the incompetence of all of you, also just because I am the smallest does not mean that I cannot mop the floor with you" you look at him angry.
Or something similar after all "other world other rules". that's my opinion
10218926 Thank you kind sir. But, reading your comment gave me another question for the Author. HOW is the Human Protagonist being the "Small" one here? The ponies can't be THAT tall! There are CALLED Ponies after all.
10219217 yes yes I remember a story that told the head princess Celestia reached the height of the pesones and the horn in the eyes and that the human was bigger than the minotaur bigger than ever seen, for that reason the fear of the ponies for the human. and that is an average height person, imagine if it was Gregor Clegane "The Mountain"
10219323 Cool. But I do one better. The Master Chief and the Spartans from Halo. Doom Slayer/Doom Guy from DOOM. The Bio Weapons of the Tyrants And the Nemesis from Resident Evil. And the Emperor of Mankind, the Primarchs, and the Space Marines from Warhammer 40K. All of them are TALLER than a average Human.
10219349 ... Eran Jager from Attack On Titan in Titan form. Imagine Celestia seeing this boy almost three feet shorter than her almost reach the height of her castle.
Well this has my attention and so far it’s pretty interesting and looking forward to seeing where things go from here and how it develops with the plot and the characters.
Thou I do wonder what the monster experts name is and looking forward to seeing his character develop and what we will learn about him. Hoping their will be a shipping for him and looking forward to seeing who it will be and if it’s one or several.
As well hope we see more bashing on the idiot xenophobic “nobles” and them being put in their place. Same with other xenophobic idiots and our monster hunter here showing most of the people here on how idiotic they are as well how ignorant, childish and naive they are and need to grow the hell up.
Can’t wait to see what other guns he will get and perhaps as a suggestion perhaps a HK416 and/or HK417 being some of them.
kewl
eeehh .. what?
I got a problem with this story. Despite being a Human Teen, who is a total expert on "Myth" Monsters and such. A perfect professional on killing the murdering Monsters. But, what the HECK is his problem????!!!!!
At first, I'm glad he got a big pair of balls, and teach those stupid xenophobic Noble Pony idiots a lesson. And scare the Crap out of them with our Guns and weaponry.
But, WTF was he thinking on trying to kill himself, by provoking that guard like that. I get that the guard is very WEAK willed and will never kill and all. But to me, it sounds like the Guy is very suicidal prone, or doesn't care of his well being. That sounds really F***** UP dude!!
Plus, he even know, and talk about the concept And differences between Pyschopaths, and Sociopaths. And make it sound like HE is one on them!!!! I mean, are you making the Human character to be very edgy, or has F***** Up MENTAL issues??!!
Because, I can't BELIEVE he will have the capacity to be a emotionless, heartless, killing machine. Like a Hitman or something. Also, it won't help him to befriend the GOOD and NICE Ponies like the Princesses, Main Six, and the rest. Because he is starting to sound like a total Asshole, and "not well In the head" trigger happy cuckoo head. Plus, it will make EVEN Discord and Eris thinking they made a BIG mistake, and for getting the WRONG guy!!!???
I don't want that to happen to Him. I STILL want him to be a Badass, and don't take total Crap from the stupid nobles. But, I don't want him to be TOO Edgy, and sound like a Asshole himself.
More please
10218823
That was actually what I was going for. or someone with Multiple Personality Disorder. Making him edgy was a complete accident. However, I wanted them to think that they fucked up before he gets the job done.
10218796
Have any questions? I'll bee happy to answer it.
10218842
Oh ok. Im NOT against edgy Anti Heroes and all. But, it's just he doesn't sound like someone with that mindset. I mean, he is not like a Hitman, Assassin, Soldier, Super powered Anti hero, or a one man army type of guy. Or even the GTA Characters like Trevor and others.
Plus, he is making his life in Equestria worse, by being a jerk to the Princesses. I get that the Nobles are idiots and they deserve to get punch really hard!!!!! But, he doesn't have to be a dick to the Princesses and Eris that send him here in the FIRST place. If they were OOC like the other Fanfics, came in as total jerks or Xenophobic themselves, that's a DIFFERENT story. But in here, there are trying to be nice and want to find a solution to the Murdering Monsters.
But, him acting like that to the GOOD and NICE versions of the Princesses and others. That sounds very rude, and a dickish move on his part.
10218867
Ya, sorry. I wrote this when I really needed to vent a ton of anger.
10218875
It's alright, I'm not even mad or anything. I like the story so far. Just a bit unnerved on his attitude. He just got to Equestria, and he ALREADY started to get in trouble and make him act he is a bad guy (In the Ponies eyes.).
Edit: Why are you angry?
10218847
10218867
well ... almost everything that the DOOM friend said covers almost all my question, although there are certain things that can be rescued, such as the part of not being trampled by anyone, after all THEY were they called/summon? to him in the first place. second the part where the noble says:
that part too mmm. It could develop differently, you know being annoyed by his attitude but responding respectfully. Something like:
Or something similar after all "other world other rules".
that's my opinion
10218926
... ya, but again, this is only a concept so I'm not sure if I would continue it. Hell, I can't keep my mind on one thing.
10218938
oh, ok then
10218926
Thank you kind sir. But, reading your comment gave me another question for the Author. HOW is the Human Protagonist being the "Small" one here? The ponies can't be THAT tall! There are CALLED Ponies after all.
10218990
Eh, I've read stories where the human was smaller than the ponies and I'd thought I'd try it. So it's not an original thought.
10219183
Yeah I know, that most of the "Human in Equestria" stories have the ponies be big as Amazon size. For a "peculiar" reason. 😳
Just thought it will be funny to see the Princesses, look up on a BIG Human guy. Like NBA Basketball athletes.
10219217
HAHAHAHA, okay someone's gotta do that now.
10219222
Yep.
10219217
yes yes I remember a story that told the head princess Celestia reached the height of the pesones
and the horn in the eyes and that the human was bigger than the minotaur bigger than ever seen, for that reason the fear of the ponies for the human. and that is an average height person, imagine if it was Gregor Clegane "The Mountain"
10219323
Cool. But I do one better. The Master Chief and the Spartans from Halo. Doom Slayer/Doom Guy from DOOM. The Bio Weapons of the Tyrants And the Nemesis from Resident Evil. And the Emperor of Mankind, the Primarchs, and the Space Marines from Warhammer 40K. All of them are TALLER than a average Human.
10219349
... Eran Jager from Attack On Titan in Titan form. Imagine Celestia seeing this boy almost three feet shorter than her almost reach the height of her castle.
10219410
Nice choice. But they will have a heart attack when they meet the Armored Titan and the COLOSSUS Titan users.
Well this has my attention and so far it’s pretty interesting and looking forward to seeing where things go from here and how it develops with the plot and the characters.
Thou I do wonder what the monster experts name is and looking forward to seeing his character develop and what we will learn about him. Hoping their will be a shipping for him and looking forward to seeing who it will be and if it’s one or several.
As well hope we see more bashing on the idiot xenophobic “nobles” and them being put in their place. Same with other xenophobic idiots and our monster hunter here showing most of the people here on how idiotic they are as well how ignorant, childish and naive they are and need to grow the hell up.
Can’t wait to see what other guns he will get and perhaps as a suggestion perhaps a HK416 and/or HK417 being some of them.
10219217
That would be nice to see.
10245165
Unfortunately, I'm sticking to Hunt: Showdown guns and there's only one full auto gun
10245487
I see and will he a pairing of sorts?
10245530
Probably, I tend to do that a lot
10246174
Ah good I always like some romance in stories.
Please continue
10218567
DAMN IT! you beat me to it!
Okay, I'm genuinely surprised that this story is getting such good ratings so far
10258690
the question is are you going to continue with the story or not?
10269802
Trying to flesh it out, I really expected this to fail
I like this character. He's really cool
Perhaps it’s in some way related to her wing being broken by the monster as soon as she and her daughter made it outside?
He seems kinda like a lame wannabe edge lord.
His “lore” seems mostly made up by you.