Im concerned. for both of them. anon still feels kinda stuck in his old ways of seducing ponies, but is also in an uncomfortable middle ground trying to be loyal to starlight. and starlight is just... off... like, she's infatuated with anon almost to the danger of her mental state. i have a strong sense of unease about the two of them. but im enjoying this. cant wait for more.
Guys help the main character has flaws I don't know what to do I can't deal with this help please I can't make believe I'm him and feel cool this isn't right
Do you ever just...Jesus. I like this...well not the smut, the story. I am getting a little close to those theories of mine, this seemed to hit the nail on the head fairly quickly. However, I feel like this chapter was (no offense) kind of half-assed. Sort of. Maybe this was intentional on your part, I don’t know. I do like the dating scene, something that Anon is having those complex moral feelings I talked about in the last chapter. Starlight hasn’t thought about Sunburst, is this tour of apology just a big fucked up plan that Starlight needed? To let go of old ways and embrace something that can benefit both Anon and her? Maybe its that aphrosidiac potion acting up. Maybe Starlight is too confused and doesn't know what she wants. Lots of maybe’s and ifs being thrown around me, good work. Haven’t read something like this in a while.
P.S. Banana Blueberry? Is that a metaphor for a blue-balled dick? Cause if it is, that’s pretty funny.
Wow talk about an...under-the-table job *Awkward rim shot* Screw you, that was funny! *Runs away crying*
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I thought it was funny.
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He he, thanks. Also I'm lovin' the story!
*<>* the meal was cooked more than this half baked smut
4/10
Do Better
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Oh dear.
Im concerned. for both of them. anon still feels kinda stuck in his old ways of seducing ponies, but is also in an uncomfortable middle ground trying to be loyal to starlight. and starlight is just... off... like, she's infatuated with anon almost to the danger of her mental state. i have a strong sense of unease about the two of them. but im enjoying this. cant wait for more.
Guys help the main character has flaws I don't know what to do I can't deal with this help please I can't make believe I'm him and feel cool this isn't right
Huh, this was an odd end to the chapter. I'm glad Starlight is dealing with her past, but her current issue seems to be of more concern...
Anon is towing a fine line, and its close to snapping around and hitting him on the ass.
Do you ever just...Jesus. I like this...well not the smut, the story. I am getting a little close to those theories of mine, this seemed to hit the nail on the head fairly quickly. However, I feel like this chapter was (no offense) kind of half-assed. Sort of. Maybe this was intentional on your part, I don’t know. I do like the dating scene, something that Anon is having those complex moral feelings I talked about in the last chapter. Starlight hasn’t thought about Sunburst, is this tour of apology just a big fucked up plan that Starlight needed? To let go of old ways and embrace something that can benefit both Anon and her? Maybe its that aphrosidiac potion acting up. Maybe Starlight is too confused and doesn't know what she wants. Lots of maybe’s and ifs being thrown around me, good work. Haven’t read something like this in a while.
P.S. Banana Blueberry? Is that a metaphor for a blue-balled dick? Cause if it is, that’s pretty funny.
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We'll see, won't we.
Although it's odd. This isn't a clop chapter. It seems to have been misunderstood. I kind of like that.
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Do what everyone does. Follow the story and be genuinely interested or REEE till you can no longer REEE.
Damn, bad BJs are no joke. Sorry Starlight and Anon!
Good chapter!
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Has it been said anywhere that starlight is with sunburst? I don’t remember that being the case at all.
So close yet so far... Guess his spear wound needs still time to heal.