Wow. Never have I been so hard for Umbra and Derpy then right now. Also loving the fact that they both have some juicy meat on them for some reason, and not just in the ass department!
This chapter contains explicit, bisexual acts of human on pony sex. After several re-writes it's still sloppy. Thanks for the constructive criticism so far, it means very much to me.
finally, we are moving along in this slow and wonderfully paced story. i shall wait for more
*<>* hopefully umbra gets some clop next ...
Decent powerplay and after multiple rewrites ..not bad not bad
Yuss, I'm loving this story.
Wow. Never have I been so hard for Umbra and Derpy then right now. Also loving the fact that they both have some juicy meat on them for some reason, and not just in the ass department!
Great job!
Now the herd is official let the true fun begin.
Quite sloppy indeed.
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Ayyyyy ( ¬ w¬)-b