Super Kinky story about a Doctor, some ponies, and a machine.
You're really rushing out with the dialogue, that's not good.
9354634Going to add that the pacing feels off... too mutch telling and not showing, rather than having to explain everything through dialouge try other merhods of storytelling.
Despite my criticue the story seems promising and it’s not that bad honestly have a good day
You're really rushing out with the dialogue, that's not good.
9354634
Going to add that the pacing feels off... too mutch telling and not showing, rather than having to explain everything through dialouge try other merhods of storytelling.
Despite my criticue the story seems promising and it’s not that bad honestly have a good day