A stone from the sky and a mysterious figure send a kid named ... to the world of My Little Pony. With new powers and a world he's only slightly familiar with, whats the worst that could happen? mlp/dbz/bleach/Naruto Gamer elements.
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*STOP* no one throw anything, not even a pebble
Crap this isn't looking good for our main man here.
This is good so far! And I know it's only going to get better!
I like the fact that he is not overpowered, but I sorta cringed a bit when he started to tell his life story. Like jeez I would of sucker punched his throat if I was nightmare cuz fuck that.
Ouch.
"Everyone back away now! If you so much as touch him, he might die! YES, that means you, get the fuck away from him with that scalpel before I turn that hoop earring into a septum ring!"
my only question is are you fucking mad mate why in they ever living fuck does Luna have a power level off 25 mil I do remind you a power level of 18000 can destroy the planet the lideral fucking planet what are those bulshit numbers I mean what the hell any why isn't Rukia not affected by 310 times normal gravity she should be literally crushed and why is he so weak I mean he should be curb stomping everything and if you want a good number for Celestia and Luna's power level give them 40 to 50 thousand and that's only because of they're Magic and that's with a stretch because Celestia can crash the Sun into the Earth and Luna can do the same with the Moon and that's the only reason if not there a pitifully weak I mean the best they can do is destroying a Mountain dude be at least semi-realistic
And now for the ranting of his life story why just why it's like you're asking for people to drop your story just redo this chapter in its entirety because I am pretending it doesn't exist because trash like this doesn't deserve to exist he should be literally curb-stomping everyone in this universe effortlessly fix the story cuz I swear it seems like you made her just that overpowered for plot convenience and if you did I will forever call you one of the most unoriginal authors I've ever seen on this site
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First, I'll correct you on the fact that a power level of even 1000 is enough to destroy a planet, considering roshi destroyed the moon with a power level of 120. Second, I've seen people make celestia and luna literal goddesses and can not die no matter what, even of they are disintegrated, they regenerate. So I think my way of making them more powerful is a lot better than that. Finally, then "Life Story" rant, he literally only explained his race and how he got there. It's not like I typed out some long ass sob story about his life before equestria or some shit.
Litsen. If you dont like the story, I dont mind that, and yes I made them slightly op, but that fits the mold of the story I'm working towards. Sure I could have made them pathetic and there wouldn't really be any change in the story, but then I would have to quite literally make up some bullshit reason that my character couldn't fight nightmare. Because of he did curb stomp her, the main 6 wouldn't have a reason to get the elements.
Again, I'm fine with you not liking the story, but don't try to force your logic on how powerful any character should be or how I should write a scene. That's not constructive, that's just telling my I'm shit and to redo it.
Though I am shit.
This was Epic now officially hooked and hyped.
Yep. Removing the constant spam of the skills list has improved the story by like 10x. If you want to have a character's skillsheet show up, only include the skill / title descriptions when the character focuses on them and asks observe to describe them, sort of like a tooltip only showing when you hover the mouse over a specific block of text.
Sure, there's still other issues, but now I don't get a headache while trying to read.