Zapp.

Zapp

This was a interesting chapter for sure. I would honestly think that Spike for now would have very mix feelings about the situation. As somedragon that has shown he is attracted to ponies there would be a slight feeling a joy that FINALLY someponies are showing a desire for him and not treating him like he is a child but like someone they can be intimate with. But on that same note as of now all he know about his fav hero is that he does the chores and he is their glorified sex toy they pass around and use whenever they want to. He hasn't seen them show that they love him just that he get their rocks off when they are stressed. Those aren't empowering things for Hum's character in fact those are kinda demeaning things he has found out about him.

Another really interesting thing is the difference between Hum and Spike. One major difference is Spike is a Dragon. That may not seem like much but this whole dynamic the PP have with Hum will effect Spike so much differently than it did with the canon Hum. As we saw Spike took it to a whole new level that Masked have never seen of Hum. And that was just really stimulation of his tail. If he had full intimacy his dragon instinct will kick in hard and he will do all he can to ruin the mare. Which will also have a major change in Spike himself as well. He has never been the one that mares have shown any sign of desire and want towards, now he has these mare that not only show it but have also seem to very much enjoy his dragonic love making.

I do honestly think tho that you could use a proof reading just to go over some of the grammar errors that kinda cut into the flow of the story.

I think we could see more about the origin of the PP and Hum, how did they meet, got their powers, how did this whole dynamic with Hum come into place. We could also see that things aren't all perfect with the PP. I mean if you read any Team based comic there is always drama of some kind going on with the team and the PP wouldn't be any different.

I think next honestly Radiance would be the best pick for who is next. I know the Rarity look alike many think should be saved but I think having her be next at THIS time would hold the most impact. Right now Spike has just triggered his dragon lust and instinct to a point he hasn't ever before. So he will be dueling with that at the moment. But for him to come across the object of his affection. And not only that but THIS version doesn't treat him like a child, but also as someone who is her equal, and the biggest thing shows she has true affection and lust for him would be huge right now. It would trigger that dragon desire and unlike with Masked he may even be the one to start it. Which will be a huge thing, not to mention it would be the perfect one for him to have full intercourse with and trigger his instinct to take him to a whole new level. It is the one that would have the most impact and set him up to be more receptive to the other girls making it more likely for use to see him be intimate with them.

Kinda surprised, figured Radiance would be when Rarity popped in, not before.

Also, very nice work. I look forward to more.

Radiance, definitely!