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Double word.
he felt guilty for not be able to do anything for her.
*being
He worked as hard as he could, making sure he didn't a single chore unfinished.
*leave a single chore
It was bliss for him, to keep him mind busy and free of his father.
*his
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Thank you~<3 I'll be sure to fix that later tonight~<3
THis poor boy really has been through hell. But don't worry Dylan, the Apple Family takes good care of you!
I tracked this story a couple of months ago, I think and I feel bad not reading it sooner. So far, this story is going decently - dialogue was well done and description was fantastic, better than what I've done. I can't really judge the story because it's not finished but it's going fine so far. I can see why people have liked this. However, what you could do better is proofreading. I found a couple of mistakes with grammar and with sentences but you can probably fix them after this story is complete. In future, keep up the effort and you'll produce a great story!
-Mr User
NNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOO we didn't had any big bonding moments till now, which probaly meant you just let it happen in between the chapters probably. I really like to see those first meetings and reactions to each other.
I guess I can't always be mad with Luna for going in the humans/ main chars dreams, it probably depens on the situation.
Sometimes it feels like she would abuse his powers and even if she does that to help, I always try to find a morally ballance as to how far she can go with her power without crossing a certian line and invading his privacy.
Nooooo
Okay so the story wasn't super interesting to begin with but the addition of a villain like this is nearly always awful.
I'm enjoying what I've read so far.