Yes by all means continue this fic till it's completed

Rlly nice so far, keep going!^^

What I saw became my nightmare for several nights after that

Missing CM? Casting painted by Pinkie?

Nice to see you back.

You should continue. This story is great.

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Awesome! I'm glad ya enjoyed it! I will do by best to keep up with it then!

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Aww, thanks! I'll certainly try to!

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Why not all of the above? >.> <.<

It's good to be back! At least, for a little while. :P

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Thanks a lot! I'll certainly try to keep up with it!

Spoiler in the title? Nice work...

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Oh shoot, I never even thought about that. ;>.> It's thankfully a minor one, but enough to consider definitely.

I'll swap it out for 'Tempest' and that should work fine. Thanks for pointing it out!

I see a ton of potential in this fic. Do not waste it by not continuing. This lookd excellent so far, and I desire to read more.

I already hope that not everyone is against Twilight or Tempest with what they apparently are planning here.
It is a nice story idea, but I honestly don't hope she is running away the whole story and only in the end they have some peace for themself and they "defeat" the princesses in what ever game they play here.

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Aww, thanks for the kind compliment! It appears a lot of people really want this to continue, so I'll certainly try my best to keep up. I'm hoping to send my next chapter out sometime soon.

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I already hope that not everyone is against Twilight or Tempest with what they apparently are planning here.
It is a nice story idea, but I honestly don't hope she is running away the whole story and only in the end they have some peace for themself and they "defeat" the princesses in what ever game they play here.

Thanks for the compliment!

That's certainly a very good concern, I'd love to answer this fully. Unfortunately, I don't want to give away any spoilers, or paint myself into a corner with possible upcoming chapters.

However though, I can tell you some of the things I am thinking about.

I want this story to come off as real and believable as possible, despite having some maturer themes. Tempest most certainly has her own wants and desires, but so does Twilight. She has things she wants to do that might not align with Tempest's, even if she's her friend (or possibly more). She has friends she likes spending time with and responsibilities to do, all that would be impossible if she got up and ran away out of nowhere. She's also a loyal student to Princess Celestia and respects and honors (most of) her words. All of these qualities you see in the movie and the main show.

In addition, Princess Celestia and Princess Luna are still the benevolent, loving rulers you see them as in the show. They don't want to cause drama or harm to anyone. They are simply doing the best that they can, with what they know and experienced in their life. They're trying to do the right thing, even if some situations don't have any.

I also plan for consequence to have a big effect in this story. Actions have real and tangible reactions. If you do something, you will certainly experience the aftermath of it.

So the story might not be as cut and dry as you fear it could be. I can also say that I plan to add additional, more dramatic conflicts as the story progresses (with a great many of them caused by the main character herself).

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I'm looking forward to that.

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Well it does sound interessting.

Just something about Twilight that I have to think about once in a while. The show probably wanted us to believe that Twilight wanted to be a princess or something, but to me it sometimes looks strange that she tries so hard and feels so bad about everything, even if it was actually kind of Celestias fault.
I know it happens in several stories uhh I mean series/movies, that the heroes just get a sudden transformation and happy ending, I just think that if you would maybe take a different look at it that you could say "this or that" about Celestia.
I remember some things that were said when it first happened, that Celestia was lazy or something, or why she couldn't be honest with Twilight instead of the possibility to traumatize her with her sudden responsibility.

I sometimes think, that if you have dreams in your live and someone suddenly comes and trew that out of the window with what they planned for you, this can be pretty bad. It suddenly reminds me of arranged marriage only that Celestia wasn't even her real familly. To be honest Twilight is a fangirl from Celestia.

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I'm glad it does!

Just something about Twilight that I have to think about once in a while. The show probably wanted us to believe that Twilight wanted to be a princess or something, but to me it sometimes looks strange that she tries so hard and feels so bad about everything, even if it was actually kind of Celestias fault. 

Actually, I disagree a lot. It's been a while since I've seen the show (and especially the episode that Twilight transformed into an alicorn) so my memory might be rusty. But as far as I know, Twilight never wanted to be a Princess. All she wanted in the beginning was to busy herself in her room and learn more magic and knowledge. After that, it was just to learn more about friendship. I feel like she has always thirsted for knowledge, not power or royalty or any of those things.

The reason I think she appears to be trying so hard is because she's trying to fulfill expectations that she believes the Princesses and other ponies have of her. Expectations of a Princess, of a guardian of Equestria. I believe she feels so bad about everything because she feels she isn't good enough.

I know it happens in several stories uhh I mean series/movies, that the heroes just get a sudden transformation and happy ending, I just think that if you would maybe take a different look at it that you could say "this or that" about Celestia. I remember some things that were said when it first happened, that Celestia was lazy or something, or why she couldn't be honest with Twilight instead of the possibility to traumatize her with her sudden responsibility.

Interesting, okay.

This is a bit hard for me to understand, but I think I get the gist of it. You're saying I should revisit when Celestia made Twilight a Princess, and re-evaluate her reasons for doing so, right?

That's most definitely something I can take a look at, yeah. I feel like it's going to be quite hard, as the episode that covers it (and the series in general) goes very in-depth on Twilight and her character arc about this. As sudden as people say her transformation to an alicorn / Princess is, I see it more as a long change and growth over time.

But it would be quite interesting to throw into the mix, yes. Thanks for the idea!

I sometimes think, that if you have dreams in your live and someone suddenly comes and trew that out of the window with what they planned for you, this can be pretty bad. It suddenly reminds me of arranged marriage only that Celestia wasn't even her real familly. To be honest Twilight is a fangirl from Celestia.

Oh okay! That makes a lot more sense now!

It reminds me a lot of Adam Jensen from Deus Ex: Human Revolution. He was a head of security who was beat up and brutally injured after a mercenary team attacked his headquarters. His boss then filled his body with hundreds of human augmentations and implants, removing his limbs, reprogramming his brain, all to make him stronger. The only problem: he never asked for it.

I think it draws an interesting parallel here: unasked for power and responsibility. It could be an interesting theme I could explore with Twilight's character and this story.

Thanks for the idea again! Perhaps it can come into play in later chapters.

Will this be updated per weekend?

Continue this. It has lots of potential and I could read it ALL the way through. Really want to know what happens.

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A lot of people said they really want me to continue this, so I'll certainly do my best. I don't want to box myself in a corner with deadlines since they stress me out a lot. I'd like to update at least once weekly though.

Also, chapter two is currently finished and currently under prereading by my awesome friend WordSPark37. Hopefully that'll be out by tomorrow or the day after that.

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Aww, thanks! It appears that I will be continuing it, from all of the people who've liked and commented here. I'm glad to hear that you're interested in it!

Good to know that I have the blessings of one intersexual princess. ;)

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Twilight never wanted to be a Princess.

well yes that is what I meant with it.

The reason I think she appears to be trying so hard is because she's trying to fulfill expectations that she believes the Princesses and other ponies have of her. Expectations of a Princess, of a guardian of Equestria. I believe she feels so bad about everything because she feels she isn't good enough.

That sounds about right.

Somehow I get the idea that you think I was trying to find reasons why Celestia did a good thing with changing Twilight into a princess, I'm actually against it, at least for why she did it or that Twilight can'T help herself but trying to fit into that role.

Oh okay! That makes a lot more sense now!

It reminds me a lot of Adam Jensen from Deus Ex: Human Revolution. He was a head of security who was beat up and brutally injured after a mercenary team attacked his headquarters. His boss then filled his body with hundreds of human augmentations and implants, removing his limbs, reprogramming his brain, all to make him stronger. The only problem: he never asked for it.

I think it draws an interesting parallel here: unasked for power and responsibility. It could be an interesting theme I could explore with Twilight's character and this story.

Thanks for the idea again! Perhaps it can come into play in later chapters.

That is exactly what I meant yes.

I think I can accept it in the show I mean we have no other choice anyway, but I would love to see this actually being a theme for a storie or Twilight acting on this. There are going to be several people who somehow still find arguments about why Twilight is going to like it or something, but if you try you can find reasons for everything.

The only other thing you could do is, that this maybe is causing Twilight to help Tempest in the end, actually acting against Celestia or handling her duties how she wants it to be done. NOt letting herself be forced to accept a tons of guards, not being able to go anywhere without them and stuff like that. When I started here, I totally hated the idea of Twilight doing her work or changing her life for her, or more that some stories showed it in such a bad way.

I flicked my tail aside, took a good look at my back entrance and flower. My tailhole was star-shaped and slightly puckered, while my vulva was spread open like half an almond on a summer day. I blushed at the beads of moisture bordering my nether lips. I wondered what happened that got me so excited.

I was wondering why she thought to look there at this moment, but she probably felt "her getting excited and needed that proof or something"

Well I had read the whole thing in one piece now, it is as good as it looked or appeared from reading this or that part, but you know about my little concerns that I had.
Well I'm going to read your comment again if I remember it and when I feel those concerns again, to remind me of what you said.
In the end this might even has a chance for a sequel.

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The only other thing you could do is, that this maybe is causing Twilight to help Tempest in the end, actually acting against Celestia or handling her duties how she wants it to be done. NOt letting herself be forced to accept a tons of guards, not being able to go anywhere without them and stuff like that.

Yeah, I was a tad confused at the beginning. But I think that's what you meant. I do admit, I think it is an interesting plotline to explore. I don't know if I'd be able to cover it in this story, as there's a lot of conflicts I have planned out already and I don't want it to be cluttered. It's a fantastic idea though. I definitely encourage you to bring this to others (or, if you're a writer yourself, explore it yourself in a story or two). It sounds awfully interesting.

I was wondering why she thought to look there at this moment, but she probably felt "her getting excited and needed that proof or something"

Yeah, that's definitely possible. I was thinking that she was just doing a through inspection of herself, but subconsciously, it absolutely could be because she was aroused or that it was brought up subconsciously. That's a very good interpretation of that.

Well I'm going to read your comment again if I remember it and when I feel those concerns again, to remind me of what you said.
In the end this might even has a chance for a sequel.

No problem! Happy to quell your concerns. Ooh boy, let me try to finish this one at least, before we start talking about sequels. I'm in over my head as it is. :P

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Yeah, I was a tad confused at the beginning. But I think that's what you meant. I do admit, I think it is an interesting plotline to explore. I don't know if I'd be able to cover it in this story, as there's a lot of conflicts I have planned out already and I don't want it to be cluttered. It's a fantastic idea though. I definitely encourage you to bring this to others (or, if you're a writer yourself, explore it yourself in a story or two). It sounds awfully interesting.

I would love to write, but I just don't feel up to it. The idea to figure out the write grammar and how they want it to be written properly with their weird writers guide looks still a bit to difficult for me at the moment and even in english when I haven't even written anything in german.

No matter how much I read, I always get the feeling I would start the sentences wrong if I include them speaking if you know what I mean.

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Yeah, that's definitely possible. I was thinking that she was just doing a through inspection of herself, but subconsciously, it absolutely could be because she was aroused or that it was brought up subconsciously. That's a very good interpretation of that.

ah yes thank you, but again I notice I always forget the even simpler reasons for something like that.

No problem! Happy to quell your concerns. Ooh boy, let me try to finish this one at least, before we start talking about sequels. I'm in over my head as it is. :P

aaawww don't worry, I think I Just like to assure that the authors aren't exactly planning an ending that would make it impossible to even think about a sequel. I mean if they have an ending with a timeskip where the chracters are suddenly old and everything, then a sequel wouldn't exactly work, at least not with the same characters.

Sometimes I think how they get the idea we want a sequel with the children or different characters at all, just in the same universe if we where fans of those exact characters.

Okay have a good day, I still got at least two or three Tempest stories to read, the hype is still strong.

Yep, you need to continue this

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I can't wait to see what you've got!

Well this is interesting!