Well this was a pretty interesting story if I do say so myself. I am a fan of the RD and Spike pairing as well. I feel it started very very strong showing a friendly relationship between the two. But I can tell you kinda lost steam near the end there with just how.... hmm forced or maybe direct that little peeping moment went. I feel with the talent we seen at the start of the chapter we will handle those kinds of moments much better later on, with more sleep lol. I hope we get to see more of RD as a pony and her backstory and what makes her her. Show there is more to her than her attitude and the same for Spike. I hope to see the two of them connect and grow close from their time together. And I think honestly if this spilled over to after the mission and we get to see them struggling with their newly developing feelings when they get back home would be very cool to see. There are just so many places this story could go from here and into the future i can't wait to see where it will end up
Definitely an interesting start, hehe. Would you like an editor, or at least someone to point out some plausible improvements? I think there's a lot of potential, marred by a few errors.
8456895 I appreciate what your saying. It's pointers like these that will help me finish this story and in the future. I want this story to turn out good as well, so I will definitely try my best to make sure that happens.
I like it, keep up the good work
Well this was a pretty interesting story if I do say so myself. I am a fan of the RD and Spike pairing as well. I feel it started very very strong showing a friendly relationship between the two. But I can tell you kinda lost steam near the end there with just how.... hmm forced or maybe direct that little peeping moment went. I feel with the talent we seen at the start of the chapter we will handle those kinds of moments much better later on, with more sleep lol. I hope we get to see more of RD as a pony and her backstory and what makes her her. Show there is more to her than her attitude and the same for Spike. I hope to see the two of them connect and grow close from their time together. And I think honestly if this spilled over to after the mission and we get to see them struggling with their newly developing feelings when they get back home would be very cool to see. There are just so many places this story could go from here and into the future i can't wait to see where it will end up
Definitely an interesting start, hehe. Would you like an editor, or at least someone to point out some plausible improvements? I think there's a lot of potential, marred by a few errors.
8456895
I appreciate what your saying. It's pointers like these that will help me finish this story and in the future. I want this story to turn out good as well, so I will definitely try my best to make sure that happens.
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I will consider it. Definitely
Thanks. I will, and I love your username btw 👍
More like fun toys
That went from 0 to 100 fast lol