Well this was a interesting chapter to say the least. I think honestly that the thing that I found to be the most jarring would be how Dash behaved sometime. She seem to act like two different mares much of the time. I mean the earlier chapters we got much more of the feeling that she was more of a free spirit mare that was very sexually active in her social circle. I would just think someone like that wouldn't fall so hard in love after like two or three days and a few matting sessions. She also seemed to gone very affectionate and girly with Spike. That isn't to say Dash can't be like that, but I just always saw her as more of the laid back casual type about something like this and less of the cuddling type lol. And she seem to go more passive with Spike than i would have figured, like when he went out of the cave. I can't see her being willing to let him go out alone in the first place hell she seems like the type to go out on her own before he would lol. I do like that Spike was the one to think they need to slow it down, since she is already wanting to drop the L bomb on things, but I thought at first it would be Dash to pump the breaks on things a bit since she is the experience one and Spike tends to feel things pretty hard as we have seen. Anyway interesting chapter still, I wonder where this will go.
8478387 I'm hoping to make so it's both pleasing and entertaining. I don't want to give it a cheesy sucky ending, I want to make it so it can go places that no one has thought of. I understand how Rainbow Dash's personality is but I wanted Spike to show that he can be just as brave and maybe even as loyal as Rainbow. I know she's more a free spirit but who's to say that she can't be cuddly? It's a side of hers that she probably doesn't show very often, one that I want to show cause she is my fav after all lol. But I do want to end this story on a positive note and do possible sequels.
How old is Spike in this? Would it not be illegal for them to be together with Rainbow being grown? And why so rushed? As cool as sex is the passion should be laid out slowly and planned in a realistic matter, otherwise it's just sex, and that can change fast. But it's your story, I'll be keeping an eye on it.
Good for a first, but could be better. Just a few things to work on; 1. Spike is a Dragon, not a dog! Claws and Roars, not Paws and Howls. 2. Stop with the giggling, please. Have him chuckle or laugh instead, thanks.
Isn't Spike a bit young for Rainbow Dash?
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I did mention in the chapter that Spike had grown in size, so he is also a bit older than he is in the show.
Well this was a interesting chapter to say the least. I think honestly that the thing that I found to be the most jarring would be how Dash behaved sometime. She seem to act like two different mares much of the time. I mean the earlier chapters we got much more of the feeling that she was more of a free spirit mare that was very sexually active in her social circle. I would just think someone like that wouldn't fall so hard in love after like two or three days and a few matting sessions. She also seemed to gone very affectionate and girly with Spike. That isn't to say Dash can't be like that, but I just always saw her as more of the laid back casual type about something like this and less of the cuddling type lol. And she seem to go more passive with Spike than i would have figured, like when he went out of the cave. I can't see her being willing to let him go out alone in the first place hell she seems like the type to go out on her own before he would lol. I do like that Spike was the one to think they need to slow it down, since she is already wanting to drop the L bomb on things, but I thought at first it would be Dash to pump the breaks on things a bit since she is the experience one and Spike tends to feel things pretty hard as we have seen. Anyway interesting chapter still, I wonder where this will go.
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I'm hoping to make so it's both pleasing and entertaining. I don't want to give it a cheesy sucky ending, I want to make it so it can go places that no one has thought of. I understand how Rainbow Dash's personality is but I wanted Spike to show that he can be just as brave and maybe even as loyal as Rainbow. I know she's more a free spirit but who's to say that she can't be cuddly? It's a side of hers that she probably doesn't show very often, one that I want to show cause she is my fav after all lol. But I do want to end this story on a positive note and do possible sequels.
How old is Spike in this? Would it not be illegal for them to be together with Rainbow being grown? And why so rushed? As cool as sex is the passion should be laid out slowly and planned in a realistic matter, otherwise it's just sex, and that can change fast. But it's your story, I'll be keeping an eye on it.
Good for a first, but could be better. Just a few things to work on; 1. Spike is a Dragon, not a dog! Claws and Roars, not Paws and Howls. 2. Stop with the giggling, please. Have him chuckle or laugh instead, thanks.
Good luck with the rest of your story!
You could eat eachother!
#sexjoke #cantstopwontstop
Lol
Their love blossomed just like I said, and again right in their bed
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alright I have to admit that was funny AS HELL, AHAHAHA!!!!
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That was pretty funny!
Something's not right... and if my suspicions are correct, then this is going to get good.