3801432 well, the couple is complete opposite, not just with the fact that pinkie is random and twi works only with physics and logic! but pinkie pie doesnt usually get worried over things, and twilight tends to let herself worry over little things! this puts, not only a sense of they can help each other, but a sense of connection between the two characters! though im not here for what clopfic is intended for, the sense played out between the two where well drawn out, and well written! not only does the story have things to add to the story, but it also keeps the reader into the story, im fairly sure that i will consider this one of my future re-reads!
heh, looks lik t old "what will my friends think of me n' my marefriend" phase is back ; eh, usually t couple has nothin to worry bout except sometimes when they hav to let their parents know cause that rite there is a wildcard
Unfortunately, Pinkie found herself immune and slowly got out of bed, kissing Twilight on the nose. "I'm sorry, the cakes expect me to be there before ten... I can come round after, if you want?"
Cakes ________________
Twilight knew they would react like AJ, but it doesnt stop the nerves that were bubbling up inside her at the thought of the town finding out
would or wouldn't?
doesn't, and since the fic is in past tense shouldn't that be didn't? ___________________
Ok here's another thing I came across when reading this.
She couldn't rely on them, what would they think?
If she knew they'd react like AJ, and Ponyville is not a hub of sexual diversity. Then why'd you go later on and say:
Her mood dropped as she remembered that they would have to tell their friends. 'Applejack know's and is surprisingly okay with it; I would have expected her to be the one that wouldn't be.'
She scrubbed harder, the stubborn stain refusing to budge, 'Rarity would probably be okay, save for the awkward questions. Rainbow is already into mares, so she would accept us.'
'Finally! The stain broke apart, Twilight smiled and started to wash the rest of the bedding. 'Fluttershy is a wildcard, I would expect her to be happy, but appearances can be deceiving. She might have untold feelings about this.'
That kind of makes the aforementioned quote a bit confusing. Why have the part when she was saying her friends wouldn't be ok and would act like AJ, and how Ponyville isn't a hub for sexual diversity and then go on to say how 3/4ths of her other friends would be Ok with it?
Anyways. Liked re-reading this chapter, and now I'm onto the next one.
Turning to leave the kitchen, she noticed a plate of cold toast next to where she had been standing. She sighed and threw the toast away, not in the mood to eat now anyway
Assassin-shy sneaks into Twilight's house just after Twilight heads upstairs, she tip-toed straight towards the bin with the cold toast in it, she carefully pulls the toast out with her mouth and quickly dashes out through an open window just as soon as Spike made it downstairs
its really good so far, im enjoying this shipping!
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Thanks, what did you enjoy about it?
3801432 well, the couple is complete opposite, not just with the fact that pinkie is random and twi works only with physics and logic! but pinkie pie doesnt usually get worried over things, and twilight tends to let herself worry over little things! this puts, not only a sense of they can help each other, but a sense of connection between the two characters! though im not here for what clopfic is intended for, the sense played out between the two where well drawn out, and well written! not only does the story have things to add to the story, but it also keeps the reader into the story, im fairly sure that i will consider this one of my future re-reads!
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This is my favorite mane 6 pairing...
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:)
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The read was quite nice as well.
ooo looks like a bit of a spicy comb.
liked this chapter right here real nice real sweet 10/10 would 10.
ronny here
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What was wrong with it, specifically? Other than being boring I mean.
3801447 Damn, that picture is SEXY!
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Is this your picture? Can I use it?
3805851 sorry just found it on google. :x
I can't wait for the next chapter to come out.
heh, looks lik t old "what will my friends think of me n' my marefriend" phase is back ; eh, usually t couple has nothin to worry bout except sometimes when they hav to let their parents know cause that rite there is a wildcard
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I'm enjoying the story so far, and look forward to more
Cakes
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would or wouldn't?
doesn't, and since the fic is in past tense shouldn't that be didn't?
___________________
Ok here's another thing I came across when reading this.
If she knew they'd react like AJ, and Ponyville is not a hub of sexual diversity. Then why'd you go later on and say:
That kind of makes the aforementioned quote a bit confusing. Why have the part when she was saying her friends wouldn't be ok and would act like AJ, and how Ponyville isn't a hub for sexual diversity and then go on to say how 3/4ths of her other friends would be Ok with it?
Anyways. Liked re-reading this chapter, and now I'm onto the next one.
Assassin-shy sneaks into Twilight's house just after Twilight heads upstairs, she tip-toed straight towards the bin with the cold toast in it, she carefully pulls the toast out with her mouth and quickly dashes out through an open window just as soon as Spike made it downstairs
poor toast... I have saved you