okay this was touching

This is going places.

very interesting. is this your headcanon for Mayor Mare? or is it in a comic? new episode?

calling the twist now-
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i am going to keep an eye on this ... i like how this story going

I had to read this twice to understand what you were trying to do with this chapter, the giant jump ahead in time is kind of jarring and I feel a lot of the information like him being in a plane crash should have been done in more detail earlier. Also a few things I didn't really get even after a second reading. Lines like why the town was in a funk and the whole 'whole county being suicidal' makes no sense at all to me. I really wouldn't throw out these rushed chapters in the future they don't really do the story justice and leave too little for the reader.

So plane flies and crashes in Pineville and he is the lone survivor. He is going to mental problems when he survivors gilt kicks in.

Are the mane six going to play any part? I like to see his welcome to Ponyville party

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It feels like the author wrote half of the story down and kept the rest locked up in their head. There are gaps of information where it feels like we're just expected to know what's going on, and how the conversation got to where it was without any actual indications.

Reminiscing about the old times... how old are the both of them?
Then again, I tend to reminisce about the past and I'm not really that old myself, so I'll admit it was a hypocritical question

Still though, no wonder Jim believes that he died in that crash too. After all, what happened to him was statistically impossible, so it's easy to see why he would rationalize it that way, at least from the start.

So that's the 1993 bombing he means?

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I thought he was referencing the September 11th attack. Seeing as he mentioned he would never see the towers again.

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He didn't understand that the towers would soon be gone for good. He grew up in the years between the 1993 bombing and the 9/11 attacks. At a very young age he was led to believe things couldn't get worse, which they did.

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Ah thanks for the claification, Love the story to bits

Really enjoying this so far! Keep it up! :)

I get it. You got featured. You are riding that really good high off of getting this thing off the ground.

That being said this chapter was lacking, and definitely could have been extended. They could have talked about living arrangements, some cursory questions or even other things.

I say this because I want to story to succeed and honestly chapters like this don't contribute much.

Take your time. We are here. Do the best job you can.

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I do agree that an "Interlude" chapter doesn't contribute much to the overall story, although I do think interspersing the "Part" chapters that will take up the meat of the fic with these smaller scenes that are more isolated in terms of plot chronology has potential to it. We will have to wait and see, given there is only one of each so far.

Fear not, fam, I'll take my time as things develop.

very big fan of this so far, if it keeps going in it's current direction i'll be a very happy camper. either way, keep up the great work!

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Yeah, right now it is completely normal that this doesn't make much sense. With that being said, you better have a good purpose for this in an upcoming chapter! I do not like to see things go to waste.

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I agree with you 100%.
I was going to outline exactly what you said, but I found your comment before doing so. I hope the writer No Raisin reads your comment because that will certainly make this story developed better in the future. Just looking at the difference between chapter 1 and 2 is incredibly harsh, it jumps to a completely different scene without explanation much too abruptly.

Gimme more please.

ah, a week jump (well, probably two days), but he's been relocated already?
Keep going! ;)

is the story dead?

How could a country be so suicidal?

Mood