They are seriously gonna be bummed what they find in that noodle of his. Can't wait for the next chapter.

80% mares and 30% stallions. ???? = 110%

This is good! A+

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I'd give this a B-

There are a few spelling errors and in some places, the way the author structures these sentences make some parts hard to understand.
I'm sure there are at least 10 other comments saying something about "RAWR MAGS NOT CLIPS" or "SUPPRESSORS ON A DEAGLE?!?!"

Also 8296192 lol

I am interested in the main theme of 'soldier in equestria' with the twist of him actually turning into a pony this time, looking forward to whatever journey you'll take us on from here.

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I have to agree, because you are right on all accounts. I'm just excited because of the raw potential this story has, and can't wait to see where this journey takes us!

Ok I really am excited for the potential of this story. But there's a lot of sentences that need restructuring. Also as a highly trained soldier I doubt he would A. Hide his weapons under a bed, leave them unattended under said bed. Or even have thoughts about finding a safe place to put them from a alien pony princess.

Also I'm really glad you're trying to be descriptive but you need to go back after a few days and reread to see if you got what you wanted across. I can tell that there's work to be done to make this story even better. Maybe even get a editor to help you out.

Also never call a pistol a gun. Use proper terminology if we're really going to do a soldier in equestria story. (Idc if that requires research)

Dropped a like

Is he a pony or anthro?

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He's a pony.

Except suppressed weapons are still surprisingly loud even with subsonic rounds.

"Well the reason to that is because our mare population out dues the stallion population. It's rare when a foal colt is born. There are so many stallions with sperm that only carry only XX chromosomes, and not many carry XY chromosomes. So the population now is 80% mares and 30% stallions." She states simply, not looking up to me as she keeps her eyes trained on my sidearm.

HMM

"I'm Princess BlueBelle, niece of Princess Celestia and of Princess Luna." The blonde mare says, sending a wink my way.

Who?

So the author thought it was a wonderful idea to gender bent a shit ton of characters. My opinion of this story just took a head dive.