At the moment Rainbow was in a room with Twilight and Pinkie. "Oh, have you fought any villains yet?!" Pinkie asked.
Rainbow sighed. "Pinkie, I've only been doing this for a few days and I've barely even seen the cutie mark crusaders cause trouble." She said, obviously annoyed.
"Do you have any superpowers?" Pinkie continued, she had been asking questions for half an hour. At first they were obvios questions, but now they were just silly. Rainbow just deadpaned.
"I'm pretty sure Rainbow would've told us if she did." Twilight pitched in. "Anyway that seems to be all the questions that make sense, but now I feel the need to tell you something." She said to Rainbow.
"Tell me what?" Rainbow asked.
"Since we've been in Canterlot, there has been a few... Murders." Twilight tried to not choke on the rarely used word.
"What?!" Rainbow and Pinkie yelled at the same time.
"As in, a pony killing another pony?!" Rainbow asked.
"Actually, judging by the victims wounds the murderer is a badger. A honey badger to be specific." Twilight answered. "That or the murderer uses the honey badger as a way to throw the police off their trail."
'Then how are the police gonna track them down?' Rainbow thought, then an idea popped into her mind "Twilight, can you make a map of where the victims lived and make a line going from the first victim to the latest?"
"Why wou- Oh, that's a great idea!" Twilight caught on. "Pinkie, do you have paper and a quill?"
"Yepeerony!" Pinkie confirmed as she grabbed the two items out of nowhere and gave them to Twilight.
Twilight took them then started making a map. After a few minutes she finished. "Rainbow, I think you're right." She said as she gaved the map to Rainbow.
Rainbow looked at the map and just like she expected, it had a pattern. They all led around ponyville. "Wait, all those ponies love animals." Pinkie stated, now suddenly looking over Rainbow's shoulder.
Rainbow looked over the map again. "And if we add that detail to the pattern then that means... Fluttershy's next!" Rainbow immediately left the building and to zoomed towards Fluttershy's cottage.
Once she got there, she saw that the door was open and she could hear a struggle going on inside. Rainbow wasted no more time flying into the cottage and immediately she saw Fluttershy using her right foreleg to stop the Badger from biting and scratching her face. Rainbow didn't know what to do, if she hit the Badger away from Fluttershy, it would tare a part of Fluttershy's leg off with it. Luckily Fluttershy managed to hit the Badger off herself. The second the Badger hit the ground it scampered into the kitchen and Fluttershy followed after it.
"Fluttershy wait!" Rainbow shouted as she followed them into the kitchen. Once there she saw the Badger holding a knife in it's teeth. Fluttershy saw this and in return, grabbed a pan. Seeing that this situation could get out of hoof fast, Rainbow shot forward and bucked the Badger through the wall. Rainbow looked through the hole it made, but saw that the animal was already gone. She looked back and saw Fluttershy fall unconscious from blood loss.
Deciding she could go after the Badger another day, she brought Fluttershy to the hospital.
Roll credits
Oh… this one. This is gonna be interesting. I only remember THE BADGER.
What room? Where are they?
… How? How did you find this out via their wounds? And you specifically know it’s a honey badger??? Even if it was because of claw marks, that would hardly narrow it down to one specific species. Anyone also could have used weaponized claws of some sort. Why do you know it’s a honey badger?! Why would you even entertain that idea, let alone classify it as MURDER?!
I’m surprised Rainbow thought of cross referencing the locations. Not impossible for her, she’s deceptively intelligent, just surprising. She’s also a visual learner, so asking for a map makes sense for her to know if her theory is on the right track.
Of course Twilight would have memorized all this and can make a map of it.
Nice continuity of Pinkie knowing the interests of everyone in Ponyville!
Heh, zoomed is a funny word to use here. In all seriousness though, did past me actually play into these character’s strengths? Am I reading this right? I’m… I’m actually really shocked. I had so low expectations. Make no mistake, I’m not trying to toot my own horn here but… I actually feel somewhat proud of this moment.
Is tare even a word? Yes. Apparently referring to the weight of the packaging, container or vehicle that is carrying an item. Of course, I meant to write tear. Also, it’s a tough call whether Fluttershy would strike an animal attacking her if she had no other choice. Not sure why she followed it though, unless she thought she could help it in some way.
Okay, first; Flutters definitely should have heard Rainbow and at least stopped for a moment to say why she was following the badger. Second; I don’t think she would grab a weapon, even to fend off an angry animal. It implies that she intends to use it to hit the animal if needed, which feels out of character. It’s more likely that she would have backed up slightly and/or try to deescalate the situation. This is especially disheartening compared to the relatively on point character writing just a few paragraphs earlier.
On a less upsetting note, it’s strange how Fluttershy immediately passed out after Rainbow saved her. It just feels a bit odd.
Too soon.
For as short as this chapter is, it felt like a heck of a rollercoaster. At first I only remembered the silliest part, the darn badger ‘murderer’ itself. Then I became legitimately proud of how I wrote Rainbow, Pinkie and Twilight. Only then to be immensely disappointed with how I handled Fluttershy. If I fixed that last scene, (and also all the pacing issues and typos) I believe this chapter could actually be pretty decent. As it stands now though, it ends on a pretty sour note.