Keep going!

*<>* So much buildup for Snu Snu

Pros: Great concept, cute all around

Cons: For the love of Celestia, please hire a proof-reader. Heck, I volunteer, anything to make those "Id" and "yea" uses disappear.

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Heh, yea ill admit I do need one. Although some discrepancies are more personal bad habits, e.g. The 'yea's. If you're offering, I wouldn't mind taking you up on your offer to proofread my work.

This is adorably awesome. Well done.

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Offer accepted! I can usually be found on the FimFic Discord Channel under "Octavia", or you can PM me here.

We pick the ball up with one hand, and throw it down a long lane towards ten pins. How the hell do you guys pick the ball up with hooves and bowl it down a lane? That is, assuming it's even relatively the same as the bowling back on my world."
"I… can't really explain that, but the concept sounds exactly the same. Pick up a ball and throw it down a lane at ten pins. Only we use hooves."
You decide not to continue thinking about how that works, and just accept it.

Skip to 1:50 and 4:15.

You swiftly shut her up with another boop to the nose. Of course, this was in front of the waiter, so when she licked your finger this time, his face was a mixture of disgust, confusion and knowing.

“I’m working as a waiter and have seen the weirdest shit already...”

Twilight and her friends. And spike, of course.

Spike in no one's friend

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nobody cares about spike