An Earth Pony named Creation Nation, comes to the town of Barcelponia to start his job as a student of an art institution. But, when he discovers that mirrors are pulling people into another world, he and 8 others must unlock a power within them.
The description looks grammatically weird, like it needs a proofreader or something. Avoid use of words like "Anyway" outside of dialogue. Also, this doesn't explain the setting properly enough.
Oops, there goes my bad habit again, always showing up with nothing nice to say.
8357414 It's constructive critism. No need to worry. I know when someone's being a jerk, and when someone's just giving constructive critism. Thank you.
Yeah! Now we're getting into the good stuff!
Off to good start, but if you're going to be giving Persona and Shadow stat sheets, you might want to tell us what those words mean.
Ooooh! Persona appeared this time!
You bet your ass I played "Last Surprise" when the fight officially started. This is GOOD!
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Thank you.
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Thank you for the constructive criticism. It's much appreciated.
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There's gonna be more where that came from!
The description looks grammatically weird, like it needs a proofreader or something. Avoid use of words like "Anyway" outside of dialogue. Also, this doesn't explain the setting properly enough.
Oops, there goes my bad habit again, always showing up with nothing nice to say.
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It's constructive critism. No need to worry. I know when someone's being a jerk, and when someone's just giving constructive critism. Thank you.
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Also, I could make you a proofreader. It would help a lot.
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Okay.
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Thank you for the advice, it's much appreciated. Also, you're pretty funny!
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