Well, this was an interesting chapter, and it'S great to see that the story has more of a proper ending to it, With Silver not having to compromise between his two love interests. I am looking forward to the other epilogues of the story. So will Synary develop similar feeling for Blossom as he has for Silver even if it won't be sexual in nature? I liked the sex scene between the three of them having a sandwich sex with each other and having two of them losing their virginity together. So, will Maple get something out of this party or will he stay a nobody like he was with Silver? Also how did they became friends in the first place?
Oh my God you're back! Great chapter! Very funny as always, it had my attention from start to end. Dialogue and description is awesome, this story is bucking awesome! No mistakes as far as I can tell, well structured and neat. Can I approve the next chapter? I'd love to since you're such a great author and I can't wait for more.
and oh goodness, this chapter made me happier than anything else in a long time, I think. The trio are ridiculously adorable and great. Thank you so much for getting them the ending they deserve, in spite of any rough patches along the way.
Your style is charmingly earnest and flowing – you should really take more pride in it. You've done a great job balancing the leads personalities against each other and keeping them true to themselves. And the porn is hot too!! I'm looking forward to any scenes you still have in mind for them.
Excited to see what that SFW piece you're working on is, too, good luck in the contest!
(Oh, uh, there were a number of errors scattered throughout the chapter, most of them were fine and didn't impede the reading, but you may want to change the things Maple is sitting on from caskets (most commonly used at the things you store dead bodies in) to casks. Kind of reframes the scene a little. If you have the entire thing in a gdoc somewhere I could give it a reread and comment any clean-up on... maybe Wednesday, if you want?)
8273321 If I didn't write and post this I would have hated myself. I apologize profusely for the errors, and promise they'll never again present in future works. I desperately needed to post something, and rushed this out, just to reassure people I'm working. Thanks for the kind words, they encourage me so. I will have something out again in the near future. Thanks for wait.
You've got a big blob of italics near the end there.
And I'm glad you're better.
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Thanks for pointing that out. I'm glad as well I'm back at writing
The dialogue isn't that bad (despite your claim to the contrary), and the clop was good.
Definitely want to see that epilogue.
hey i didnt know you were into lunaverse
https://www.fimfiction.net/story/63307/the-jackelope-valley-festival
Well, this was an interesting chapter, and it'S great to see that the story has more of a proper ending to it, With Silver not having to compromise between his two love interests. I am looking forward to the other epilogues of the story. So will Synary develop similar feeling for Blossom as he has for Silver even if it won't be sexual in nature? I liked the sex scene between the three of them having a sandwich sex with each other and having two of them losing their virginity together. So, will Maple get something out of this party or will he stay a nobody like he was with Silver? Also how did they became friends in the first place?
Oh my God you're back! Great chapter! Very funny as always, it had my attention from start to end. Dialogue and description is awesome, this story is bucking awesome! No mistakes as far as I can tell, well structured and neat. Can I approve the next chapter? I'd love to since you're such a great author and I can't wait for more.
Really wonderful to see you back to writing!
and oh goodness, this chapter made me happier than anything else in a long time, I think. The trio are ridiculously adorable and great. Thank you so much for getting them the ending they deserve, in spite of any rough patches along the way.
Your style is charmingly earnest and flowing – you should really take more pride in it. You've done a great job balancing the leads personalities against each other and keeping them true to themselves. And the porn is hot too!! I'm looking forward to any scenes you still have in mind for them.
Excited to see what that SFW piece you're working on is, too, good luck in the contest!
(Oh, uh, there were a number of errors scattered throughout the chapter, most of them were fine and didn't impede the reading, but you may want to change the things Maple is sitting on from caskets (most commonly used at the things you store dead bodies in) to casks. Kind of reframes the scene a little. If you have the entire thing in a gdoc somewhere I could give it a reread and comment any clean-up on... maybe Wednesday, if you want?)
8273321
If I didn't write and post this I would have hated myself. I apologize profusely for the errors, and promise they'll never again present in future works. I desperately needed to post something, and rushed this out, just to reassure people I'm working. Thanks for the kind words, they encourage me so. I will have something out again in the near future. Thanks for wait.
I'm not going to lie, they are the best trio to ever be
I have to say, this is both adorable as well as sexy, I wish I had those sort of exploratory experiences when I was that young.
Besides a few fairly minor errors, small enough that it didn't interrupt the flow of fhe story much, this was pretty solid.
Definitely looking forward to the next chapter.
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I'm working on the final chapter now.