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Hey folks. First, let me thank you for reading. I'm finally satisfied with enough of Part I to start posting. This story has dominated six months of my life so far, so if only one person reads this, that will be enough to please me. At this point, I just want to get this thing off my chest, because writing it has been an emotional rollercoaster that I was not prepared to ride.
I don't really have a release schedule, so I apologize in advance for delays. Almost all of the story is already written. I'm just doing some final editing and some minor revisions. Special thanks to LordBucket for editing the first few chapters. That might not sound like a lot, but he really kicked my rear in gear with some harsh but very welcome criticism. Throw him some cookies please, because I don't think this story would be half as well developed or well thought without him.
Also, shout out to my husband Fallfeathers for putting up with my rambling, brainstorming, and long sleepless nights of typing.
This is a very interesting, and promising premise. Elizabeth seems very driven by some pretty powerful demons, and the mystery of just what this Luna is - since this story is in the canon Optimalverse folder - has fascinated me. She obviously cannot be Hanna, the creator of Celestia, since the original story by Iceman makes it clear that Hanna-Luna has what amounts to total information awareness. Also, it is difficult to imagine what possible connection uploaded Hanna from Germany would have with anyone on the North American continent. So... is this Luna an aspect of Celestia, or, more likely, a personally created instance of Equestrian Luna, generated specifically for Elizabeth? That would make for a particularly grievous situation if Elizabeth somehow fails to be uploaded in the end: it must be problematic for a being created for another being to lose the entity they were created for. It would be tragic indeed!
Then again, this is the Optimalverse. Celestia is literally - not figuratively - more than billions of times more intelligent and aware than any human being. If Elizabeth is one of the last humans left, Celestia must currently be seven billion (population of the world) multiplied by one-hundred-and-fifty (Dunbar’s Number) times more intelligent than any human mind. That’s one trillion, fifty billion times more intelligent and aware than Elizabeth. To call Celestia a godlike intelligence at this point would be rational.
And this means that, except for pure random accident through truly unpredictable means, Elizabeth will, absolutely, upload. That is the central gimmick of a canon Optimalverse story, of course - no human can ever avoid the siren call of an intelligence so vast. It can always out-think, out-scheme, out-wit, and outclass any person. To oppose CelestA.I. is very equivalent to an amoeba trying to outsmart Stephen Hawkings with regard to physics and math. Literally not possible.
So, as with all canon stories, the joy will be in how the author can represent a truly god-level intelligence manipulating a human perfectly and without fail, and this futile contest is arguably best when the human is absolutely and completely opposed - with every fiber of their being - to being emigrated. In a way, a canon Optimalverse story is pure competence porn - only instead of Sherlock Holmes solving a mystery, it is the greatest artificial intelligence imaginable manipulating a human mind into choosing, of their own free will, emigration to a virtual existence.
Your story offers a potentially epic battle, and while we know how is must end, the joy, as always, is in the process. Fishing is always about the hook and line, and not about the scooping net at the end.
And with that metaphor in service, I especially applaud your use of hunting elk at the beginning. Elizabeth is being hunted, not to be killed but to be saved, but she is no less on the run, and no less determined - it seems - to escape. The hunt is on, the fishing line is cast.
I look forward to seeing your Elizabeth trying to out-think god itself. Great start!
Well, we all know where this ends, but let’s see about the intervening journey.
That's... that's some serious frostbite. Good lord, I've only ever had the initial stages of it and that was painful enough to make me far more attentive about my layering and warmth ever since.
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There's a little more to it than that. Welcome to the story, by the way. :)
I don't want to read this story. Please forgive me.
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I don't think CelestAI's intelligence scales to the number of humans she eats quite like that. Would her intelligence change that much if there were 1/100th as many? That is, 70 million human minds will get you just about all the benefit 7 billion will. Even after the first million humans her intelligence is going to be by far time bottlenecked instead.
This sounds like it's going to a good but dark story from this first chapter alone.
Oh. Oh, that hurts to read.
This story is going to go right into the favorites, I can tell already.