What role does the royal nephew Prince Blueblood actually play in Equestrian society? As one who may accede to the title, I could be on the verge of finding out...
Also, this reminds me of something we discussed in the Give Blueblood Some Character group many months ago: That maybe, just maybe, the royal line of Equestria is made up of madponies who are trying their best to function despite that.
I love this story so far, I always love Prince Blueblood as a controversial character and all the myriads of way that he was interpreted of his character by the fandom. In this care, I really like he idea that this Blueblood is some sort of... living doll that Celestia has been using the entire family lineage to live out her old memories, like a an old toy that she can never afford to let go. As said in the last chapter, I also think this obsession of Celestia is unearthly, but I suppose that the Blueblood fantasy is a way to cope with the many lonely centuries that she lived thought, especialy without her sister. I wander his there is going to be a history with Luna as well. I wander if he will try to find out more to understand the history between that original Blueblood and Celestia.
I wander if we will get to see more of those other Blueblood siblings, especial the pedophile one.
I really thought I could do this whole thing and still stay in "Teen" territory, but I found myself crossing over the invisible line into "Mature." Still, I'm having way too much fun writing this guy's 90 word sentences...
I wouldn't normally want to see a fic this well-written go full-blown M, but I agree with you on this one. Also, it essentially ensures that Titanium Dragon won't read it, which is a definite plus.
Still, I'm having way too much fun writing this guy's 90 word sentences...
I'm sorry about the tone of my review. I rated your story at or near the top of my list even though the run-on sentences drove me straight up the wall.
At least it's another reminder of my failings in communication. I should tone back my reviews significantly—it's bad to use hedgey sorts of words in fiction writing (exception: Flutterspeech), but essential when trying to help somepony who is clearly a better writer than I.
Right on their heads in that review, actually. I needed to better establish how and why Our Narrator is so darn loquacious, and I hope I've done that in the rewrite here. I will maintain, however, that each sentence is scrupulously grammatical--or at least they would be scrupulously grammatical if I was writing them in Latin...
I hope I'm not spoiling things too much when I say that chapter 4 opens with Celestia lambasting Blueblood for the way he treated Rarity at the Grand Galloping Gala. So Luna's soon to be a featured player in these shenanigans.
I've got the feeling that an aspect of the long sentences is that it is an instinctive form of Gish gallop, overwhelming an interlocutor with too much to rightly follow and respond to rationally, thus getting in the way of his guiding where he wants to go--at least when applied in speech rather than narration.
The next set:
Of chapters will be "What 'Prince' Really Means" and will start showing up here, oh, maybe by the first of February?
Mike
I always wondered what precisely Blueblood's official task was. Interesting premise and an intriguing beginning. Looking forward to more.
Fascinating.
Also, this reminds me of something we discussed in the Give Blueblood Some Character group many months ago: That maybe, just maybe, the royal line of Equestria is made up of madponies who are trying their best to function despite that.
This was amazing in the Writeoff.
I love this story so far, I always love Prince Blueblood as a controversial character and all the myriads of way that he was interpreted of his character by the fandom. In this care, I really like he idea that this Blueblood is some sort of... living doll that Celestia has been using the entire family lineage to live out her old memories, like a an old toy that she can never afford to let go. As said in the last chapter, I also think this obsession of Celestia is unearthly, but I suppose that the Blueblood fantasy is a way to cope with the many lonely centuries that she lived thought, especialy without her sister. I wander his there is going to be a history with Luna as well. I wander if he will try to find out more to understand the history between that original Blueblood and Celestia.
I wander if we will get to see more of those other Blueblood siblings, especial the pedophile one.
I can't wait to see what will come up next.
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Thanks, folks:
I really thought I could do this whole thing and still stay in "Teen" territory, but I found myself crossing over the invisible line into "Mature." Still, I'm having way too much fun writing this guy's 90 word sentences...
Mike
I wouldn't normally want to see a fic this well-written go full-blown M, but I agree with you on this one. Also, it essentially ensures that Titanium Dragon won't read it, which is a definite plus.
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I'm sorry about the tone of my review. I rated your story at or near the top of my list even though the run-on sentences drove me straight up the wall.
At least it's another reminder of my failings in communication. I should tone back my reviews significantly—it's bad to use hedgey sorts of words in fiction writing (exception: Flutterspeech), but essential when trying to help somepony who is clearly a better writer than I.
Insanity is hereditary. You catch it from your (adoptive) aunt.
Now what I *really* want to see is what happens when Luna returns. After all, they share everything in Equestria equally...
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You hit several nails:
Right on their heads in that review, actually. I needed to better establish how and why Our Narrator is so darn loquacious, and I hope I've done that in the rewrite here. I will maintain, however, that each sentence is scrupulously grammatical--or at least they would be scrupulously grammatical if I was writing them in Latin...
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I hope I'm not spoiling things too much when I say that chapter 4 opens with Celestia lambasting Blueblood for the way he treated Rarity at the Grand Galloping Gala. So Luna's soon to be a featured player in these shenanigans.
Mike
I thought this was where the story was building towards, but the reality exceeded my expectations.
I've got the feeling that an aspect of the long sentences is that it is an instinctive form of Gish gallop, overwhelming an interlocutor with too much to rightly follow and respond to rationally, thus getting in the way of his guiding where he wants to go--at least when applied in speech rather than narration.