You established him as completely unstoppable with seemingly infinite power that was apparent available to every pony all this time. What's a power base even necessary for?
I'm not sure it can really get darker. At this stage it would just be adding variety or quantity to the evil deeds.
Good world-building in terms of asshole grandma, the aristocratic bloodline stuff, and Haftling's increasingly developed slave mentality to her 'god.'
Love the stasis thing, but in a sense that I can't wait to see it be used for even more depraved stuff. Not sure if I should suggest things for it or not.
This story disgusts you and you see it as beneath you, but you can't stop yourself from being a good writer, and no matter how crap you think it is, you can't stop this from being a well-executed death-and-pornfic.
I'd definitely like to see it continued, though as I've mentioned, I'm far more of a fan of the sexual violence than the violence violence.
It's weird; this story's triggers are things that I normally try to avoid... yet I've read through everything so far, probably because it's not super graphically written (yet, at least). Whatever the reason, keep it up!
You established him as completely unstoppable with seemingly infinite power that was apparent available to every pony all this time. What's a power base even necessary for?
I'm not sure it can really get darker. At this stage it would just be adding variety or quantity to the evil deeds.
Good world-building in terms of asshole grandma, the aristocratic bloodline stuff, and Haftling's increasingly developed slave mentality to her 'god.'
Love the stasis thing, but in a sense that I can't wait to see it be used for even more depraved stuff. Not sure if I should suggest things for it or not.
This story disgusts you and you see it as beneath you, but you can't stop yourself from being a good writer, and no matter how crap you think it is, you can't stop this from being a well-executed death-and-pornfic.
I'd definitely like to see it continued, though as I've mentioned, I'm far more of a fan of the sexual violence than the violence violence.
It's weird; this story's triggers are things that I normally try to avoid... yet I've read through everything so far, probably because it's not super graphically written (yet, at least). Whatever the reason, keep it up!