2- First... And Second Impressions?
Where the human known to Twilight as 'Peyton' was a large specimen -Standing a full head over a pony as large as Big Macintosh, who for stars sakes had the moniker big right in his name- both in height and gut, the new one was somehow even taller. He (Twilight assumed it was a stallion, the humans seemed mammalian in appearance, and didn't seem to have pronounced mammaries.) was a good half hoof taller than Peyton, although his torso was decidedly slimmer than his... friends'? Brothers'?
For all Twilight knew, Peyton could be the new ones father. Both of their manes were roughly the same length, Peytons being a dusky brown while the newcomers was a jet black. That wasn't saying much though. Everypony knew coat and mane color wasn't genetic. Their ages was hard to judge, especially seeing as they were a different species. Peytons voice sounded like a grown stallions (that being, it didn't contain the vocal strains notable in a younger colt) but humans could very well sound like drowning fish once they got older.
Peytons attitude and behavior struck Twilight as... slightly odd. It was almost like dealing with a colt at times, his motives and actions energy fueled and erratic. Actually, it was rather like dealing with another Pinkie Pie. A rather subdued Pinkie Pie (wasn't that a scary thought), but one in the same vein nonetheless.
Twilight hadn't even so much as heard the new human speak yet, so she couldn't very well judge him against the other one. He was a lot thinner, so maybe his voice would reflect that? Twilight suppressed a giggle thinking about the new human suddenly starting to talk in a falsetto. He would say something like 'I'm a human! I'm taller than Peyton and that makes me younger... somehow.'
"Yo? Sparks?"
Twilights head shot back upwards at the sudden voice, teapot jerking in her magical grip. More than a couple splashes escaped the teapots spout, but were quickly cleaned up with another spell.
After she had noticed the presence of the two humans standing in her libraries entrance, she had of course invited them in to talk. When one wanted to ply another ponies mind for information, Twilight found that offering something to drink and a paltry snack went leagues towards that end goal. Hectare Home style tea (Twilight found that while most ponies would rather have coffee, tea tended to render a pony into a more agreeable state.) and Baltimare style biscuits. She had already baked them, might as well use them. Otherwise she'd have just ended up using some cookies from the jar. If Spike hadn't eaten them all already. He should know better, but he'd been caught a couple times already.
"Sorry, just... a lot on my mind," Twilight bashfully stated, filling the other humans cup after she cleaned up the minor spill. "It isn't every day a brand new species just... shows up..."
"That's-" the new human started, and Twilight excitably catalogued the fact that his voice for the most part sounded normal. Maybe he was roughly the same age as Peyton?
"No problemo, Sparksie," Peyton crowed, waving a hand dismissively. Twilight didn't see why Lyra had such fascination with the appendages, sure they looked dexterous, but they looked so... fragile. "We won't hold it against you."
"Seeing as I'm pretty sure Peytons introduced himself," the new one stated pointedly, gaining a sheepish grin from Peyton. "I might as well do the same. You did welcome us into your... house? Library house? Anyway, my name is Tom. Tom Majors. Pleasure to meet you," he ended, holding out his hand.
Why was he holding out his hand? Did he expect her to touch it? Would touching it be considered an insult? Was it like a hoofshake? But they weren't hooves, what if initiating a hoofshake resulted in those delicate digits getting damaged? Oh goodness, what if she accidentally harmed one of them? Then they'd leave and she'd never be able to learn anything more about them!
Twilight gave the human a wide grin, extending her hoof... to gingerly tap the top of his hand. Better safe than sorry. The human gave her a bemused grin, shifting his arm to reach up and grasp her hoof. He then gave it a short, single shake.
His hand was... surprisingly strong. It definitely had more grasping power than she would have thought looking at the spindly fingers.
"A pleasure to meet you, Tomtom Majors," Twilight stated, the hand grasp going on for slightly longer than felt comfortable.
"Just Tom," he said with a laugh, "I guess I said that twice..."
Suddenly Peyton shivered, his eyes darting from side to side.
"What is it Peyton?" Tomto-... Tom asked, his reaction quickly mirroring his partners. It was stunning to Twilight how quickly their demeaner had shifted from a warm, genial attitude to this suddenly tight, wary countenance. One moment they were simply these gawky, tall apes, then what she was faced with were undoubtably the faces of two battle hardened warriors. She had seen this shift once before, years ago when her brother wasn't yet a full fledged guard.
Her brother had been sitting in their dining room, numbly shoveling cereal into his tired gob. Weakly laughing at a joke Twilight had told him whilst trying to cheer him up, going through the motions. Then suddenly, at barely a single sound out of the ordinary his whole body had stiffened. With a blur of motion he had placed himself between Twilight and the open window. A bare moment and he had quickly erected a shield of glowing magic, which further protected himself and Twilight against the hidden attack.
A water balloon. Shining Armors drill sergeant had been making his rounds, putting the fear of death into all the recruits by springing surprise attacks during their supposedly down time. It was a harmless attack, but an attack nonetheless. And Twilight had seen her brother turn into a warrior from one second to the next.
"Preemptive cake!" Peyton finally called out, swiftly reaching over to poke a hand under a book Twilight had rested on her coffee table some time ago. What he did next... he pulled out a cake. And threw it out the nearby window.
"Counter pie!" Pinkies voice called out from someplace outside the open window, slightly muffled by distance. Moments later, Pinkies threat was carried out as a raspberry pie sailed in through the window Twilight should have simply closed the second she heard Pinkie called out. It was going to splatter everywhere, and then she'd have to clean it all up she just knew it!
Goodness this was embarrassing. First (second, but what was that to stop Twilight?) contact and Pinkie was showing her very worst side as a prankster. What if they took offense? What if they decided that Pinkie was actually trying to attack them and decided to declare war on behalf of wherever they were from? Gosh darn it Pinkie you could have a just waited until they knew us better...
"Counter counter pie!" Peyton called back out, whirling on one foot in a feat Twilight would have sworn was impossible without the counter balance of a tail. His hand reached out as he spun like a top, snatching the pie out of midair and flinging it right back out the window. A viscous splat sounded from outside, followed by a long period of silence.
Twilight once more took stock of her guests, carefully inspecting their forms. She was almost on a hair trigger herself, ready to at a moments notice grab both of them with her magic. If they were about to spring into a fury then she would do her best to placate them until they came back to their senses. Surprisingly, neither one of them held the posture of an angry individual.
Tomtom Maj- TOM had slumped into a relaxed pose, leaning back slightly to rest comfortably in his chair. He didn't look worried at the current events, and instead held a bemused grin at Peytons actions. Peyton himself had a satisfied grin stretched across his face, his body tense in anticipation.
"You sunk my battle ship!" Pinkie called in from outside, prompting a stifled laugh from Twilight.
"Aha! The enemy is routed!" Peyton crowed, whirling to grab yet another two cakes from under two other misplaced books. Twilight wasn't sure how she should feel about that, she could have sworn that she had just set down those books earlier that very day, how had the confections gotten there in the firs- Pinkie Pie. Of course, why was she even surprised? But... how did Peyton know they had been there? "We must be away, and press our advantage!"
With that he sprinted out of the room, a moment later the thud of the front door signifying his departure. Tom still remained seated, a hand massaging his brow.
"Sorry about that," he sighed, demurely taking a sip of tea. "He should wind down in a little bit. Peytons a bit... high energy, but he can act mature when he needs to."
Twilight giggled, "Don't worry about it. I'm just glad Pinkie didn't mess up the kitchen, Spike just cleaned up in here!"
Tom nodded along, "Is she always like that? I wouldn't want to assume, but from what I've seen so far..." He stopped, looking around, "By the way, who's Spike?"
A brief moment of clarity rushed across her mind, signaled by the flash of sheepishness that made its way across her face. "Spike? He's... well if you see the little dragon wandering around, that's him. You can't miss him! Unfortunately he's not here right now, he's over at Rarity's at the moment. I'll introduce you to him later if you want..." Twilight trailed off, unsure of the wisdom of imposing on the human. What if he had other plans and didn't feel like sticking around to get drilled with questions?
"A dragon? Awesome." Tom noted, skipping over Twilights worry.
Twilight got to her hooves, carefully checking out the disturbed books left in the humans wake. "Darn it Pinkie," mumbled, careful to keep her voice low. The humans ears didn't look particularly strong, so at this volume she should be able to rant without disturbing him. "What did I tell you about leaving perishable food lying around the library? Wait," she stopped, a thought occurring to her. "How did Peyton know it was there?"
"Probably because Pinkie knew it was there," Tom replied, making Twilight momentarily splay her ears in embarrassment. He had heard her, so she obviously had been speaking way too loud. Thank goodness she hadn't been saying anything really embarrassing, as is it was slightly mortifying.
Then something in what Tom said wormed its way into Twilights thoughts. Pinkie? Knew?
"But... how did Peyton know?" Twilight reiterated, her attention fully on Tom now.
He didn't look too concerned, slightly confused but overall nonplussed.
"Because Pinkie... wait, did Peyton not tell you about Chaotic?" Tom asked, a slight smile crossing his face.
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I wonder if the ponies will ever be able to visit Chaotic. The thought of the princesses going there and battling as themselves would be pretty interesting... Would the elements be considered battle gear?
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Technically. And at that, they would have to be equipped to a creature capable of channeling the given element. ADD TO THAT, the Chaotic player would have to have all six elements, equipped to six different creatures in their match (they don't work if you leave off even one) and as they are currently they'd be a one match shot. If they missed the first time, that's it. No second try.
Also it should be noted that the elements aren't really an ATTACK type... thing. We've seen them return a corrupted essence to its base state (Princess Luna), encase a chaotic force in order (Discord) and once powered up to their true power (Tirek arc) all they did was again, return an essence of imbalance to a state of harmony.
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So it would basically be a super expensive cure all, or an expensive debuff?
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The majestic, magmatic, magnificent lands of Peytonia shall be victorious!
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Eeyup. At present time, anyway. And against some of the worse creatures (like the warbeasts and merillians) the elements would probably encase them in stone. Technical win.
peyton and pinkie isn't the sinker of ships. its the new ship. actually that could be funny. "too bad you're not a human girl or I'd be all over that like swiss on cheese!"
Then finds out about mirror portal.
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Honestly, Peyton doesn't strike me as the type of person to base a relationship around nothing but appearance.
17 year old boy (the wiki says all four main characters are 17 while Klaybourne is 21, try to puzzle that out...) though, so yeah if he sees a girl with a nice body you'd have to be stupid to think he wouldn't try to check her out. But really, he hangs out with a girl like like Sarah and has NEVER been seen to show any affection for her beyond pure platonic friendship, so who knows what his physical preferences are?
Note that I am not saying that I'm shipping Peytpie.. Pinkieton... whatever that mashup would be. Also not that I'm not saying that I wouldn't...
Ehn, who knows what the future will hold? Long distance relationships don't seem to work all that well. Wonder how that would go...
"Yeah mom, I'm already married. She's a pink alien quadruped from another dimension, and you'll never be able to meet her, no. Also, I'm just going to start living like a hermit.
7667956 HAIL! HAIL! PEYTONIA--wait. Magmatic?
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I may secede to Pinkopolis...
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Hot, burning, rippling with enigmatic fury and youth!
I foresee a replication of Tom's first use of Bodal.
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Technically that already happened with Peyton using Twilight in his drome match.
Toms already seen that Twilight (and really, all the ponies that Peyton used. Even Lyra had the ability to thoroughly creep his Mxxor scan out, and Maxxor is touted as having a ridiculously high courage score. Yes that's a thing.) is a surprisingly effective fighter, and even though she's technically above the norm (Tom doesn't know that yet) all ponies have the species advantage of cutiemarks.
Each and every single pony is literally geared toward a specific talent. If players can figure out which ponies fit their play style, thne they can be even more effective...
7668286 Yeah, but remind me, how big is Spike? That was more like seeing Mipedians for the first time.
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Spike is his traditional size in the show. As stated in this chapter, Peyton is about a head taller than Big mac, and Tom is a few inches taller than Peyton. So... just compare against Big Mac for size.
Spike comes up to almost the bottom of Twilights chin, from what I can remember.
7668451 Still tiny
I wonder how a pinkie clone would fare against the real pinkie... plus, time travel is a possibility. If the starlight glimmer situation occurs during a drome match and the battle drome isn't there would that leave the character stuck in form until the drome is built? in theory if they were a unicorn they could still teleport, and What about Sunset Shimmer in Chaotic, that would definitely add another wrinkle to the whole mirror reality.
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Klayborne: As you can see, with even the most perfunctory battle gear from the wastes of the underworld even a simpleton like you can see the lethal potential of Fluttershy. This card was was painstakingly scanned after Krystella and I sacrificed our winter socks and threatened the life of a baby bunny, careful that shock of hers will give you such a pinch.
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"Such a bleeding heart, Major Tom. Any moron with two brain cells to rub together would be able to see the potential these wimps have when they get mad! Sure, we have to threaten a pathetic lil' bunny to get her to play along, but you know as well as I do that if the scan is worth it..."
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The only sad part is that if you don't know what Klaybourne sounds like, then any lines of his that you read don't really do him justice.
You have to say his lines out loud in his tone of voice to just get across just how skin shivveringly vile he truly is.
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I kind of felt he had way to much facial hair. Then again I didn't loose the last of my milk teeth until I was 10 years old and didn't have to start shaving until I was 23. Not to mention I didn't even have to start shaving my soul patch until I was 28.
Great to see you're back in action here, I wasn't a big Chaotic show but if their is someone how can redeem it in my eyes it's you and it's starting well so fare, I hope you will be able to keep it up. Also, 75% done.
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Apparently Clay IRL is Mr. Numbers on Fimfiction. Good to know. I was wondering what he'd been up too when he wasn't trolling N00b's in Chaotic.
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Whereas in highschool I knew a guy in my class who had a full on hobo beard even in the first year. I think his name was Marcus? Marcus... Ha----something.
He wasn't overly large, he seemed to take care of himself (so yeah, the full beard was intentional) to the point where he never caused an unpleasant smell in class (Unlike this OTHER dipshit who never seemed to brush his friggin teeth, and ALWAYS leaned in and talked quietly which forced to you to lean in as well if you ever wanted to know exactly what he was saying. Screw you Lional. Lionel. Liorio. However the hell his name was spelled.) and never tried to bring attention to it.
It was never something that he had to promote, it was just 'oh, I have a beard? How odd, my how very queer... Oh well,' and then he'd go back to whatever.
Not like this other guy who ALWAYS wore a cowboy hat for no other reason that he thought they were cool. While I agree that they are cool, he just tried to push them too dang hard.
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I always assumed if they had too much hair they were undercover cops (especially in middle school), which is ironic becasue I remember this one girl had really hairy beast arms and I always wondered why she never shaved it off. The excuse was that she was on the swim team, and shaving it made her arm hair grow faster and hairier, but I never bought into that.
Back to chaotic as I recall, Tom was a total criminal informant that one time, and if Klayborne is in his 20's he could easily be a cop, moderator, or codemaster hiding in plain sight, his surly/salty personality could be to keep others from figuring out his secret.
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In my own headcanon, Klaybourne works full-time at a video rental store. This was at that time before those places folded, mind you. So this surly 21 year old wakes up each day, goes about his business at a job he hates, working with coworkers that he hates, catering to customers that he despises.
On the other half, he has access to a world where there are practically no consequences. Where he can shove a player headfirst into a pit of lava, turn around and do the exact same thing to the exact same player the next day when they send another memory-self in, trying to figure out how they died before.
"Oh, I know how you died. I was there, this player called Major Tom done an' shoved you head first intah' pool of steaming hot lava! That guys a right prat, he is... Best steer clear o' him if you ever want to have a pleasant Chaotic experience. Bastard would sell you to a mipedian for a single scan..."
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I suppose it's better than not having a job, when I was that age I walked to the video store on a daily basis with ankle weights on just to rent horror movies. That used to be where the film school graduates worked until they equipped themselves like Zach Stone or became police officers like that guy from the glades. These days you can graduate from college with a film degree you and expect to be treated like Randy Marsh.
7675478 I love this chapter keep it up my friend and let me know when the next chapter is uploaded thanks my friend
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No, no, Klaybourne is definitely codemaster fummofu and was an original beta tester for Chaotic's ham ham adventures before they encountered legal troubles and the project was scrapped.
of course that's nothing compared to what krystella was up too...
I like it.
Wonder what will happen when the princesses get wind of this.
Did Twilight send them a letter about this yet?
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Nope, not yet.
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This would be a fun update to look forward too as well.
7702332 Hope to read more soon!
Update soon?
7702332 When will the next chapter be up.
(before reading)
This is interesting. Lets see what it is made of.
So much potential, so little care.
(If you're not one of Those kind of people who would yell at the person who said a single negative thing, I thank you)
As Tom explains Chaotic to Twi', he could be used to explain to those who didn't see the show.
By that I mean on how long it has been since the last update, I'm not trying to demonize it.
Though, in my opinion, it could have done without the two chapters explaining the lore, when it could have been done literally the chapter after this.
Still, this is interesting and I hope to see more... within my lifetime....
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I thank you for your concern and patronage, and assure you that I would welcome any and all input, be it praise, opinion, or even the lesser liked critisicm that most blindly refer to as meaningless vitrol without even a passing thought to a possibility that they may have done something wrong.
Most people don't like admitting they're wrong, or that they themselves could ever be associated with something that wasn't spotless and perfect. Those people are abject morons for refusing to see the truth in front of themselves and simply change something for the better.
I realise that I... don't have the best update schedule. Multiple reasons account for this including obligations outside of the internet relaxing time, a heavy case of writers block that I can't seem to shake recently, and a choice to update all of my stories and release each chapter on the same day.
So you have my apologies for the hefty delay of the next chapter.
In regard to having Tom deliver the exposition to Twilight in their meeting... I will be honest. I absolutely despise when characters just stand around and blithely vomit exposition for no other reason than the fact that the writer has no better way of delivering pertinent information to the audience. I am a devout loather of the ever popular 'cafe exposition scene' and I try to get out my information in a way that if at the very least doesn't feel organic, will simply get the information out of the way and allow the reader to get back to the story.
I realize that delivering the information in non story chapters might come across as lazy. For that I also apologize.
Thank you for your comment, and may you have a wonderful day.
8012342 It's alright, I'm lazy too.
Not proud of it. 
And yes, I do realize that it could have been intrepid as 'just add needless exposition here'. I'm sorry if you thought I was suggesting that. Believe me when I say I HATE those as well.
No, what I was referring to was a clever and slightly subtitle way to explain the lore. I would try to make it as natural as possible, don't put any more information than outside the relevant question being asked by the person asking for the lore, this case being Twilight.
The lore would be expanded as the story progresses, it shouldn't be all explained in one scene. THAT would be lazy.
But I see you're point, as you've said 'let the reader get on to the story' this is very much true. All I'm saying is let the exposition be part of it. it would be a time to let Tom and Twi' to bond, while waiting for Paton to finish his sudden war effort against the breaker of physics.
Please update this. The idea is really interesting, but it's so short at the moment...
Why did you decide to stop writing this story?
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Just... Dealing with stuff.
Ohh Twilight...prepare for your world to get ROCKED!
Also, could you continue this please? I really like what I be reading so far.