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My only critic point would be that you should show that Rigi is really into sex instead of telling it. Show not tell is something really important when it comes to character. If Rigi is a huge pervert, then you have to show it in chapters. Since this is a clopfic, best would be to show it in clopscenes, since he has even enslaved two beings. Maybe some scenes where he is dominating one of his two slaves? Or a scene where he is sitting down in the living room, while one of his slaves is slurping away at his cock? Such things would help make their statements here more believable. Of course I don't know if you already edited the previous chapters and added such things, but I thought I might mention it, just to be sure.
Edit: I'm currently working on a CoC fic. You are welcome to share your thoughts and maybe even ideas on it if you like!