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It technically is a bit late to be alarmed, considering he didn't react to being turned female. I expected some anger or displeasure right there, instead it seems a tad strange that this is the only reaction from him. Not to mention Naruto didn't react at all.
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7619865 Rewriting now.
To the first, yeah, that part confused me too. My co-author decided to throw that in at the last second without telling me and I had to work with it. But intentions are listed and it should be fixed now. As for the question of why no one is questioning them traveling together, they just saved the town. I don't think towns ponies are in the mood for questions at that moment.
Secondly, I was able to put a bit more emotion coming from the harpy now. Though she doesn't show her true personality until a bit of time has past and I and Flair have come up some things for the second girl. I just hope its good enough.
Thirdly, going to write a scene with the harpy at the house, maybe a bit of the second one by either a tease or full on, haven't decided as of writing this. You were right, though. It does feel lacking at times when I read through that part.
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I didn't mean the townponies. I was just wondering why the dragon joined him, even though the other guy just cut him loose and the new human just killed that guy that cut him loose, hence him killing the dragons savior and the dragon following the slayer of the savior making me confused.
Also the description of the story is nice, but it doesn't fit the story. The description says that almost all fell to debauchery, only in the story we don't see a single pony who actually fell to it. The situation doesn't seem serious. Scenes where ponies are raped and thoroughly enjoying it as they get corrupted would be a way to correct that. I mean, you have I think three enemies that were taken care off. You could have easily put a scene like that in it. Just saying it again, since I now noticed the description of the story which sounds like a promise for open public debauchery. A promise that is left unfulfilled.
Also glad you take my advice and try to work on it.
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me like
Lol naruto and sasucka Turn into girls