The realization that it's everyone's fault is half-cathartic. Why? Because Zak still gets away with it. While I really enjoy the pacing, I hope you don't drag it for too long since it will leave readers apathetic.
“It’s not like that,” Rainbow nervously tried to explain. “We were just trying to help.”
“Yeah, well, you didn’t!” Sunset furiously replied.
“I’m sorry, I just wanted to help.” – Sunset Shimmer.
“Yeah, well, you didn’t.” – Rainbow Dash.
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“We trusted you, Sunset! We thought you were our friend!” – Rainbow Dash.
“How could you do this? After all we’ve been through together?” – Rarity.
I trusted you! I thought you were all my friends! How could you do this to me?! After all we’ve been through together?!” - Sunset
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“No you’re not! You’re not the person we thought you were! You’re not our friend!” – Fluttershy.
“You’re NOT the people I thought you were! You’re NOT my friends!” - Sunset
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“This is it, Sunset. You’re not going to take advantage of us anymore. I’m sorry, but you did this to us. Tell whatever secrets you want. But we don’t have to listen." – Applejack.
“This is it. You’re not going to take advantage of me anymore. I’m sorry, but you all did this to me. Tell whatever excuses you want. But I don’t have to listen." - Sunset
And 5 ironic echos in one chapter, *hugs you* I'm so proud!!!!!
Also Zak raises a good point
“It’s crazy how a piece of jewelry and a few flowery words can make someone think you’re their friend,” “But it’s even crazier how a few stupid photos can turn people against each other. Am I right?” “What’s the matter? Oh my god, are you all speechless?! That’s a first. I still can’t believe you all just turned on her just like that. Now that’s cold, even for a guy like me.” “Take a good look in the mirror! You five cast your friend out like garbage, never once thought of the possibility that she was being setup, and you didn’t even care that others were making her miserable. I bet you actually enjoyed it too. You can’t honestly think any of you are better than me.” “Hell, you even forgave the real culprits so easily,” “I guess you all prefer anything over Sunset Shimmer.”
Also.....
“This is all your fault!” Trixie accused the Crusaders. “You and your stupid Anon-a-Miss stunt.”
Couldn't have said it better myself, I wouldn't be surprised if the Crusaders become hated even more
.....OK then. It's clear they need a lot more help now more than ever. Oh, if only a girl from another dimension would come right now. A girl who is purple with dark purple hair with a plain purple and pink stripe running down on it. Surely she would have a better chance reaching out to Sunset than the Rainbooms did. *hint hint*
8902552 Yes the same blindly trusted the human five to actually help Sunset for real? The same girl who failed to be there in person to help Sunset in person at the time. the same person who never followed up afterwards....Yeah that a good idea.
Before you say Twilight was too busy, you forget, in the comic twilight was in her library with some books and sent that message an you can do is trust in your family blah blah blah yadda yadda. Wow she was swamped then counting her books and making sure they were organized to come in person.
I do love the story and i know you hinted things will work out, but honestly prefer it works out for Sunset only. Rather she turns her backs on her exfriends for good, as they shown not be trusted or counted on when the chips are down, for her that is.
8902926 Not really. Before maybe now....not so much. The comic really screwed things up, Twilight should of been there in person, but she was putting all her faith in the human versions to listen to her, and only worked. Because the CMC confessed then.
If they hadn't you really think things would gone as smooth? That why a lot of fics where they don't confess and Sunset's torment continues.
8902930 Ok then. I think I understand what you’re saying. But something must be done. Sunset can NOT be in a relationship with someone as despicable as Zak. He is abusive and no remorse no remorse for his actions. She can’t go on like this. If she does, she’ll probably end up dead. So, even if it takes 10 more chapters, What I would like to see in this story is her finally putting her foot down and telling Zak “NO!”
But that’s not going to happen. Because, thanks to this whole Anon-a-Miss thing, she’s emotionally fragile.
8902953 Don't count on that. I don't really make stories that involve Sunset's demon form because if that part still existed inside it would mean that everyone's suspicions about her were correct. In my opinion, the old Sunset Shimmer died that fateful night at the Fall Formal. The evil demon side of Sunset is gone, forever, and all that's left inside Sunset is goodness.
So after reading the recent chapter and doing some research I believe Sunset is suffering from some kind of Stockholm Syndrome. How I believe that is because of this:
Stockholm Syndrome is what happens when a victim (Sunset in this case) develops feelings towards their attacker or abuser (Zak) in this case. Now from what I read it's more common in hostage situations but I believe that Sunsets case is strangely similar, albeit different progress.
After Anon-a-miss pratically beat Sunset to beyond her lowest point she felt helpless, weak with no one to turn to. Hence this gave Zak the chance to make his move and comfort her. But when he started abusing her the Stockholm Syndrome changed over to Zak and Sunset started to accept what he does to her. Unfortunately to recover and move on the victim has to realize that their abuser is not what they think and have to accept and move on.
Man this is getting more and more intense. BTW a thought occurred to me since Sunset wouldn't listen to them it probably would have been better if they separated her from Zak. They probably could have asked Twi to open the portal and trick her into going through, that way Twi could just leave the portal closed until the human five can reason with her, but then again Sunset would probably have a panic attack and try desperately to activate it while repeatedly calling for her "lover". Plus Zak would probably lose it and take his anger out on the students, CMC included.
....I'm not crying.....i'm not.....I promise I'm not.
The realization that it's everyone's fault is half-cathartic. Why? Because Zak still gets away with it. While I really enjoy the pacing, I hope you don't drag it for too long since it will leave readers apathetic.
Well damn!
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And 5 ironic echos in one chapter, *hugs you* I'm so proud!!!!!
Also Zak raises a good point
Also.....
Couldn't have said it better myself, I wouldn't be surprised if the Crusaders become hated even more
Well, damn. Now whay camn they do? How can they save Sunset when she no longer wants their help?
.....OK then. It's clear they need a lot more help now more than ever. Oh, if only a girl from another dimension would come right now. A girl who is purple with dark purple hair with a plain purple and pink stripe running down on it. Surely she would have a better chance reaching out to Sunset than the Rainbooms did. *hint hint*
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And a purple and green dog
Someone might want to hold me back cause I will go ballistic in three seconds.
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*shoots you with a tranquilizer*
8902666
Dick....
*passes out*
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you'll thank me later
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Yes the same blindly trusted the human five to actually help Sunset for real? The same girl who failed to be there in person to help Sunset in person at the time.
the same person who never followed up afterwards....Yeah that a good idea.
Before you say Twilight was too busy, you forget, in the comic twilight was in her library with some books and sent that message an you can do is trust in your family blah blah blah yadda yadda.
Wow she was swamped then counting her books and making sure they were organized to come in person.
I do love the story and i know you hinted things will work out, but honestly prefer it works out for Sunset only.
Rather she turns her backs on her exfriends for good, as they shown not be trusted or counted on when the chips are down, for her that is.
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So...are you sure that Twilight won’t have a better chance of talking to Sunset than the Rainbooms did?
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Not really. Before maybe now....not so much.
The comic really screwed things up, Twilight should of been there in person, but she was putting all her faith in the human versions to listen to her, and only worked. Because the CMC confessed then.
If they hadn't you really think things would gone as smooth?
That why a lot of fics where they don't confess and Sunset's torment continues.
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Ok then. I think I understand what you’re saying. But something must be done. Sunset can NOT be in a relationship with someone as despicable as Zak. He is abusive and no remorse no remorse for his actions. She can’t go on like this. If she does, she’ll probably end up dead. So, even if it takes 10 more chapters, What I would like to see in this story is her finally putting her foot down and telling Zak “NO!”
But that’s not going to happen. Because, thanks to this whole Anon-a-Miss thing, she’s emotionally fragile.
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With her fragile as she is, the Demon will come out to play.
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Don't count on that. I don't really make stories that involve Sunset's demon form because if that part still existed inside it would mean that everyone's suspicions about her were correct. In my opinion, the old Sunset Shimmer died that fateful night at the Fall Formal. The evil demon side of Sunset is gone, forever, and all that's left inside Sunset is goodness.
So after reading the recent chapter and doing some research I believe Sunset is suffering from some kind of Stockholm Syndrome. How I believe that is because of this:
Stockholm Syndrome is what happens when a victim (Sunset in this case) develops feelings towards their attacker or abuser (Zak) in this case. Now from what I read it's more common in hostage situations but I believe that Sunsets case is strangely similar, albeit different progress.
After Anon-a-miss pratically beat Sunset to beyond her lowest point she felt helpless, weak with no one to turn to. Hence this gave Zak the chance to make his move and comfort her. But when he started abusing her the Stockholm Syndrome changed over to Zak and Sunset started to accept what he does to her. Unfortunately to recover and move on the victim has to realize that their abuser is not what they think and have to accept and move on.
Man this is getting more and more intense. BTW a thought occurred to me since Sunset wouldn't listen to them it probably would have been better if they separated her from Zak. They probably could have asked Twi to open the portal and trick her into going through, that way Twi could just leave the portal closed until the human five can reason with her, but then again Sunset would probably have a panic attack and try desperately to activate it while repeatedly calling for her "lover". Plus Zak would probably lose it and take his anger out on the students, CMC included.
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Yeah she needs to get a librarian. She spends a third of her time in it and that can't be healthy.