IT WAS A SIMPLE PLAN!!
Being a Proto-Queen to a new hive sucks; what was wrong with how I did things? Sure the negotiations were going well, but that one noble griffin said my mane was ugly and I told the Prince of the Griffin Empire if he didn't agree to it I would punch him in the beak.
*Sigh* Okay, let's start from the beginning; my name is Ril and I'm the Proto-Queen to the newly made in the Smoky Mountains; it seems that there was a dragon cave without a dragon in it, it also felt like home. I used to live in the hive near the Griffin Empire with my mother, Queen Avi, and my two other sisters.
Everything was going fine until that meeting with the Griffins. Now, my mother told me to leave the hive; That’s stupid! I shouldn't have to leave the hive due to that. But Nooo… she said that if I want to be a better queen I need to learn to be less aggressive.
She allowed some of the drones to come with me since I was still a Proto-Queen, about… ummm….
<How many of us are in the hive? >
<About a hundred and fifty my queen. >
<Thank you very much, Mell. >
So yeah a hundred and fifty drones; what? I’m terrible at remembering numbers. Anyway, why Smoky Mountains? Well, first it reminded me of home and second it's in Equestria; the land of pushover ponies.
Like literally they are pushovers, they make friends with anything, even a rock. Well, actually that would be fine, rocks were cool who wouldn't be friends with a rock? But anyway they're pushovers so setting up my hive and expand my territory will be a cakewalk!
Well, that was what I first thought.
A few years ago when I was still setting up my hive I heard news that Queen Chrysalis, one of the queens of the hives in the Badlands who is known to be brutal yet cunning, went and attack Canterlot; and then got defeated on the same day by TWO PONIES!
How? Just how?? They were one of the well known warrior broods that were ever known and they were beaten by the ponies; maybe they were just lucky right. Right?
Well, something just happened a few months ago. A centaur named Tirek drained all the magic in the land and was basically a flipping God; and yet he was defeated by one pony. JUST ONE! Ok, he was defeated by six of them, but for the most part it was one.
So they’re as the pushovers that I thought and I not only having a hundred and fifty drones verses a lot more ponies plus four Alicorns and two of them can move the celestial bodies around and one of them was the personal student to the Princess of the Sun; there’s also what happened the past few years so I don’t think I would win; which is a pain because I think we have a fighting chance… kinda… sort of… maybe.
I groaned as I put my head in my hoofs; this should of been easy. All I have to do is build up my forces and prepare and don’t pull a Chrysalis. But now that plan is off the table; I don’t think trying to take over is a really good idea to begin with.
“My queen are you alright?” one of the drones asked me. I believe his name was Ilikon.
“No, I'm not alright.” I told him with a sigh. “I had everything planned out, build the hive up and forces to be ready for anything and expand our territory.”
“You mean try to take over Equestria?” he asked. I eyed him for a minute before speaking.
“Yes… well, no not really not all of Equestria, just like a small bit of it.” I explained to him. He frowned at this.
“My queen if I may the idea of getting more territory is, and I stand by it, a really bad idea.” he said. I looked down at him with a frown.
“Explain.”
"Well, there was Nightmare Moon who tried to take over Equestria and put it in an endless night, then there was Discord who was… well was being himself, then there's the prime example of Queen Chrysalis; do I need to continue?” he asked.
“No, I get it.” I rubbed my temples. “We can't fight them, they would destroy us in a second; what do we do?”
“How about negotiating a peace treaty with them?” he said. I set my gaze on him and stood up from my throne.
“You want me to negotiate with the princesses for peace?” I asked him slowly. I was a few feet away from him, but I towered over him.
“Um…” He stammered as I grew closer.
“Ilikon, that plan of peace is…” I saw him sweat and started shaking. I tilted my head a bit. “Actually a good idea.”
Ilikon stared at me for a minute blinking in surprise. “Ummm, what?”
“The idea of negotiating for peace, it would be better than hiding and sneaking around, who knows, maybe my hive can go out without shapeshifting!” I said excitedly.
“Uhh my queen, you do know that you're… well how do I say this?” Ilikon tapped his hoof to his chin.
“Speak your mind Ilikon.” I told him.
“Well, you don’t have a very good track record with negotiating.” he bluntly said. I looked at him and frowned.
“I’m not that bad.” I said defensively. He just raised an eyebrow.
“There’s that one time with the Griffon prince.”
“He called me ugly!”
“And the time with another changeling hive that came over.”
“They didn’t agree with the way I look at things.”
“And again the Griffon prince, with his guards.”
“They started it and I was still mad at the fact that he called me ugly.” I snapped back.
“Don’t take this the wrong way my queen, you’re strong and a great queen to follow it’s just that you kinda let your temper get the best of you and you’re very aggressive when you want something, well with everything really.” he said.
“I don’t see what’s wrong with that, everybody will do anything for what they want.” I told him.
“Yeah, but you’re a bit more… brutal about it.” he said.
“BA what do you know, anyway, this negotiation will do very well with my other plan.” I said with pride in my voice.
“Err, what plan my queen?” Ilikon asked. Right, I didn't tell anyling about it.
"Well, since the ponies are much stronger than I thought, so I sent some drones out to get one of the nobles and bring him or her back here.”
Ilikon stared at me. “You sent drones out to ponynap some noble, just you can interrogate them.”
"What, no I'm not going to ponynap them, I'm just getting them to come here and ask him or her some questions then they can leave.” I shook my head at him. “Honestly, what kind of fool do you take me for.”
Before he could say anything a changeling came over the hive mind, I like to call it the network.
<My queen, we have returned and brought the guest. >
<Excellent! Bring the pony to one of the rooms with the one way glass. >
<Of course, my queen. >
I smiled brightly at this, everything is coming together nicely. I looked over at Ilikon as he had a neutral expression as he looked at me.
“Come, we have a guest to meet.” I said. We headed out of the room into the hive. I saw some changelings coming and going, they nod at me or say hello when we pass. I may be the queen, proto-queen, but I don't need my adopted children to bow to me. Truth be told the idea of bowing as I pass by is kinda stupid if you ask me, what if you're carrying something really heavy or easy to break and I walked pass, if you know you'll drop the thing and it will break. A simple hello is plenty.
We continue down the tunnel towards our destination, along the way I saw some newly made rooms were added such as a clothing store, a gym, bookstore, and a restaurant. I sniff the air and smelled the aroma of cooked meat, my mouth began to water
Yes Changelings can eat meat, well, some of us do, it depends on what the environment they grew up. I and the rest of my swarm came from the Griffin Empire, not a lot of veg there and the Griffins eat meat. They're also a lot of animals and creatures there that want to eat you, so it's a battle of survival.
I made a note to myself to come back to get something to eat from there when I was done with the guest, after five minutes of walking we came to a tunnel with many doors and opened the one with the number ‘2’ on it. I walked in and saw two changelings looking through a window before turning their heads.
“My queen,” they both said and bowed, see this makes sense they weren't carrying some breakable and I was walking into a room.
“So, this is the noble that you got, huh.” I said as I looked through the window and saw what I could guess is a pink Pegasus. Said Pegasus had a bag over her head as she tried to shake it off.
“We must apologize for being so long our queen.” the one on the left side. It’s funny, it’s hard to tell the difference between a male and female changeling; yes, there are female changelings and no they don’t turn into queens, well unless you're REALLY lucky. Just as a quick lesson on the differences of a changeling in my hive, a male is a bit bigger and stocky, their horns are more straight or jagged and short spiky manes and tails, also their wings are also a bit spiky while the females are smaller and rounder, their horns are curved with medium to long manes and tails, their wings are also a bit rounder.
“What do you mean by that? You got the noble and came back alright.” I said to her.
“Yes, but you see, this noble isn’t from Canterlot.” she explained. I looked at her and frowned.
“What do you mean, not from Canterlot?” I asked her. She shifted a bit on the spot.
“Well… umm… you see… uhhh…” she stammered. I can tell that she’s nervous as she begins to sweat, why are they all are always nervous around me? Am I really so scary?
“What my comrade is trying to say is that due to the attack the other hive has done, the security in the place was tight and we couldn’t do anything to get in, so we headed out to the Crystal Empire.” The other changeling, male, explained. The female turned and gave him a small smile. I looked back at our guest as the shaking became more violent.
“Oh for bloody sakes, take that bag off!” I yelled. Ilikons horn lit up with a blueish aura and so did the bag. It lifted off the head of the now know to be a mare, I saw that she also had a horn as well. Odd she looks familiar.
“Odd why does she have a horn? Are horn and wings a popular thing now?” I asked as I looked at the mare.
“Uhh my queen, do you know that a pony with both wings and a horn are known as an Alicorn right?” Ilikon told me.
“Yes, I know.” I replied.
“Also, do you know who she is?” He asked. I looked over with a blank look as I saw that he too was a bit nervous. “That’s the Alicorn of Love, the same one that blasted Queen Chrysalis and her hive to who know where.”
I turned to the window and stared at her. My wings dropped as the realization hit me like a boulder. An Alicorn was sitting in my hive and probably have enough power to turn it into a crater.
“Umm Queen Ril? Are you alright?” the female changeling asked. I fell to the ground and covered my head.
“IT WAS A HARMLESS SIMPLE PLAN!!!”
Meanwhile in the Crystal Empire
Twilight came out of the mirror without any problems and was reunited with her friends and the other two princesses. After retelling her tale to them, she looked around and frowned.
“Where’s Cadence?” she asked. The rest of them looked around for the pink princess, but didn’t see her.
“Odd where could she be?” Luna said. Celestai looked and saw one of the crystal guards trotting quickly in the hall.
“Excuse me.” she began. The guard fumbled with his hooves to stop and bow to the three princesses. “I would like to ask where’s Princess Mi Amore Cadenza?”
The stallion shifted a bit without looking are the Solar Princess. “Don’t… don’t you already know?”
The princesses and five mares and dragon shook their heads. The guard sighed slightly.
“Well, two days ago Princess Mi Amore Cadenza was… ponynapped… again.” Silence filled the void at what the guard said. That until:
“WHAT!!!!”
Hey! I made a new thing! Well I made it a while ago and it's not really new, I always wanted to do a Changeling story but I couldn't figure out how I want to write it.
Then came Queen Aze who helped me with this one, if you haven't seen or read any of his stories... go do that now!!!
Anyway any errors you can see that I have missed can you point them out please and thank you and any advice for me would be great, but be nice 
]
See you all in the next chapter :)
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Cadence you peachy pony you. I wonder how this will go?
This is to FUN
so cadence's shaking, is it the "gagged and struggling in ropes?" kind, or the "traumatized by past experiences with changelings" kind? it was a little unclear.
in all not a bad start in all, I see some potential.
And of coarse I have a suggestion, in stead of...
"Third-person, Crystal Empire"
change it to something like.
"Meanwhile in the Crystal Empire"
Not only is it a bit more humorous, but it's also a lot less redundant since you don't really have to tell the reader about the shift in perspective if you've changed the scene so completely. Also if Queen Ril is going to be the only character written in first person you probably won't need to point it out at all.
7448864 Cadence shaking is the 'Trying to get the bag off of her head.' Kind of shaking, will change later.
Needs some revising and proofreading, but otherwise looking to be a funny story.
Obviously Cadance has some kind of kidnapping fetish that she just won't admit to.
Can't wait for the next chapter.
7451952 HA!
I like myself some good Changeling Story.
*gets some popcorn*
Keep going
hello 7458831 question the queen is the mother of all workers in the hive?
7513831 yes...
well this is going to be good, so waiting for the 2nd chapter.
hello 7515012 I like the new art.
another question
when will the next chapter will come out. not that I want rush you. I'm just curious
7526088 It will take some time, mostly due to the fact that I didn't know how the start of the chapter will go.
7526093 ok,
you need some help. maybe I can help. I also have problems with my story. so I have a little experience
7526093 so I did bookshelf with all the stories where the queen is the mother of the hive and I wondered if I missed any or if I have all. what do you think? http://www.fimfiction.net/bookshelf/851658/queen-mother-of-the-hives
7529003 I think it's cool that you did that. I also want to ask you something. There's a story on there... The Wedding Aftermath. the writer is a good friend of mine and is somewhat in a bad spot, depression sucks~
He's working on two other stories, one that comes after The Wedding Aftermath story and a Sombra story and would love to hear some feedback on the stories. What's good, what's bad, what needs to be improve on, etc etc. I'm trying to help him out but I want people to comment on his stories.
7529019 ok sure, I am not finished reading The Wedding Aftermath. but when I finished reading it, i shall give him constructive criticisms
7529517 :)
Well, look like this Queen is both hot-headed and unlucky... It's not like anything can go wrong with such a combo right?