7467892 I figured there would be, hence why I mentioned I'd be doing it at work so it's all being typed on my phone. But I will do the best I can to keep this spell error to a minimum.
7468574 Well yes, I also noticed that it was added to the Dusk Shine Love Life group too, Though this story focuses more on after Dusk had taken over. He's been King for a while now. i do plan on explaining some bit on how he took over. But most is around what a Dusk ruled Equestria looks like.
7468946 Sombra isn't in this story, he female version. And to an extent this is her plan. But Dusk proved far too much for her to handle, so now she is an obedient Queen to him; doing everything for his sake.
7469820 No, for this story I want people to point out my spelling errors. As I am writing everything about the story from my phone while I'm on break at work
7495355 hey dude just to let u know that i was alerted that that the chapter was up and the page says it was update today but for some reason it is no where to be seen. Im scared, what sorcerey have you conjured up this time gree?
Good story, if not a few spelling mistakes.
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I figured there would be, hence why I mentioned I'd be doing it at work so it's all being typed on my phone. But I will do the best I can to keep this spell error to a minimum.
Wait, is there more to this? Because I see a complete tag on this.
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I will make more
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Ah, then I will favorite this and watch, waiting for the backstory.
Great story, looking forward to more
Anyone want to call out any predictions, feel free to do so.
Interesting premise. Dusk Shine going evil Overlord on everyone, with Umbra as his companion in evil and sex. Hopefully the first of many.
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Well yes, I also noticed that it was added to the Dusk Shine Love Life group too,
Though this story focuses more on after Dusk had taken over. He's been King for a while now. i do plan on explaining some bit on how he took over. But most is around what a Dusk ruled Equestria looks like.
this is going ot be good story i can tell,
cant wait for more
Stupid thing to point out, but isn't the whole thing Umbra's plan, not Sombra's? Just being nitpicky...
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Sombra isn't in this story, he female version. And to an extent this is her plan. But Dusk proved far too much for her to handle, so now she is an obedient Queen to him; doing everything for his sake.
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Double check the story description... You jumped from Umbra to Sombra and back again.
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Thanks for pointing that out
That was embarrassing
Queen Umbra may rule the Crystal Empire, but King Dusk Shine who rules her.
I think there is a bit of missing text here.
Queen Umbra may rule the Crystal Empire, but 'IT'S' King Dusk Shine who rules her.
I may be pointing out something that didn't need to be pointed out, but I have a clear dose of Grammarnazi syndrome.
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No, for this story I want people to point out my spelling errors. As I am writing everything about the story from my phone while I'm on break at work
I must say, I look forward to seeing what comes next. No mater how slow it is.
So what happened to Dusk's brother/sister?
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More details will be revealed in the next chapter
I hope Dusk is smart enough to use these tips
I like.
But
and
Otherwise I like the idea of corrupting Dusk heavily backfiring X3
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Sorry, all of this is being done on my phone as a challenge, so spelling errors will occur sadly. But thank you for the sharp eyes
i was alerted that a new chapter was up but i dont see it.
7495541 same here
7495558 I hope this is just a bug or alchemicgree may need to upload the chapter again
7495355 hey dude just to let u know that i was alerted that that the chapter was up and the page says it was update today but for some reason it is no where to be seen. Im scared, what sorcerey have you conjured up this time gree?
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same here
7495355 I figured. I could see the telltale signs of autocorrect.
7495717 okay glad to know that it is not starting to be just me. Something happened on gree's side that probably he doesn't even know.
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During my typing, I accidentally hit the publish button but corrected myself. The chapter is not ready yet.
7496245 NANIII????????!!!?!?!?!?! YOU ARE A TEASE ALCHEMICGREE! A TEAAAASSSEEE!!!!!!! but still lol