so rainbow is the rebel leader and celestia and luna have no clue this is happening this is gonna be fun to see their reactions

Ok, I who is writing this? It's obvious that alchemigree isn't, he does a better job at editing beforehand.

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It is me doing this, I'm doing this from a phone(as a challenge), so there will be spelling errors(courtesy of auto correct) and the screen is only like 4x3 inches, and I have pretty big fingers.
I could easily do any corrections from my computer before publishing, but then what would be the point of the challenge?

7502373 hmm, well you have a point there. Ok, but the storyline could use some more explanation later on.

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Well, if noticed, I edited the previous two chapters and will edit via computer but will write the stories on my phone. As for story explanation, it's slow but I am explaining what's happening.

7503050 it's a different perspective on the way he could be corrupted, i will be reading.

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Yeah, the plan is to have it be a daily life story.

ugh

killing the crystal ponies made me loose it

seriously that was totally unecessary

... So I know I said this would be an interesting story or whatever, but seriously. Complete boner killer. It's like Nevachrea from Zelda's Honor, except they sort of had a reason for mutilating people as they sexed them up. Here, it's just "We're evil... yeah, that's all we've got."

Everyone's got an axe when the caribou do these things, but if its the ponies y'all OK with it? Talk about double standards.

It was a good concept, but I'm really not into snuff. Not to mention I would have felt even a corrupted Dusk Shine would be less... pointlessly wasteful. Of course, even before that I was hoping for a bit more of a nuanced dynamic between Umbra and Dusk Shine.

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As you can see above, I am not okay with it, and as you can see below several others are also not okay with it. And I also suspect that the people who dislike this would dislike... the thing you're referring to which shall otherwise go unmentioned, and those who like it would also like this, so there's no double standard.