"But when the child is born, I will tear it from you, leaving you in the deepest pit I can send you."
He had better not mean out of her body. But who are we kidding, he'd probably get off on it. But I have to admit, I'm kind of glad that it's ending soon. Looking back on it, the concept and the execution itself are contrived, and there doesn't seem to be much going for it except "look at what I can do now that I've lost my marbles!" It seems less like a story, and more like an elaboration for a what-if scenario, you know what I mean?
7623823 Yeah, the whole thing started with a thought I had but unless I wrote some "how did it becone like this" prequel, the story will just stay as it is.
He had better not mean out of her body. But who are we kidding, he'd probably get off on it.
But I have to admit, I'm kind of glad that it's ending soon. Looking back on it, the concept and the execution itself are contrived, and there doesn't seem to be much going for it except "look at what I can do now that I've lost my marbles!" It seems less like a story, and more like an elaboration for a what-if scenario, you know what I mean?
Good new chapter keep up the good work m80.
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Yeah, the whole thing started with a thought I had but unless I wrote some "how did it becone like this" prequel, the story will just stay as it is.
kind-of sad to see this end.
It has one HELL of a solid story, and background (with what little we have to go off of).
maybe just MAYBE you'll consider a sequel down the road?????
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Given how I'll end it...not very likely. But that's why I'm putting so much into the ending.