*Blushes Hard*
Can't say I'm disappointed (although my face is completely red) but I have to say, this turned out well. Don't feel ashamed of yourself, trust me this is really good.

You shouldn't feel shame, dude. This was great, sweet, and really hot.

Sorry, but I'm no stranger to clopfics; believe me.

Oh shit Nordryd is writing clop! I gotta see this!

don't be ashamed, this is a healthy part of any relationship... if it's done right

Goood, goooooooooooood

Don't be ashamed! This was adorable, sweet, cute, and hot! Especially lustful Coppermane. Most well-written clopfic that I've ever read!

7524008 yes I did. Hope you like it

I'll admit, I'm a little torn by this one. There was plenty of good, but I also find myself questioning some things.

As usual, it was quite well-written. I could have done without the hundreds of words-worth of apologizing, but I suppose that's par for the course with Fluttershy and Coppermane. You've pretty much gotten Fluttershy's character down pat, so there's no worry about whether or not you can characterize her correctly. Also, for the record, I don't think Sunset was OOC at the beginning. The way I see, she has a different perspective on love and relationships, given that she grew up in Equestria as a pony, and not on Earth as a human. There's definitely some cultural differences there, and I understand where Sunset is coming from.

The one issue I have comes from Fluttershy's decision-making. Sex is a part of a healthy relationship. But it is not a substitute for proper communication. I'm sure you've heard stories of married couples who are past their honeymoon period and are beginning to experience marital issues. Sometimes in these scenarios, they believe that if they have a child, it will somehow fix the problems. Usually, however, the exact opposite comes to pass.

That is kind of my issue with this story. Putting aside the fact that Fluttershy committed sexual assault (enjoyable blowjob or not, it was done without Coppermane's consent or knowledge), the characters are using it as a crutch or a gateway to communication, instead of focusing on the communication in the first place. Fluttershy's issue at the beginning is not a problem with intimacy, it is a problem with communication. So the solution should come through communication, not intimacy. That's just my bit of couples therapy.

That all being said, it was still a good story, well told.

7524310 That's something another author said, but I already had half of this written, and didn't want to redo it.

You also have to remember that this is both Coppermane and Fluttershy's first time in a relationship, so they aren't quite sure what to do. Fluttershy immediately regrets essentially raping Coppermane to get his attention, and Coppermane regrets putting Fluttershy in a position that makes her think the only way to get his attention is intimacy, which she might not be ready for.

And the communication verses intimacy thing, I like to think that Fluttershy is more distracted by the thought of intimacy. Maybe she doesn't know it at the moment, but maybe she is ready for it? Then again, you're right, it's a question of communication. Point is, she doesn't know what to do, and sees this as the only solution. Her personality doesn't want to inconvenience Coppermane, but at the same time wants to talk to him. She doesn't know what to do, so she takes the only solution given to her.

And again, Coppermane feels horrible for making her think she has to be intimate with him to get his attention, because she doesn't.

They both made a big mistake, Coppermane probably more so, but in the end they shared perhaps the most magical thing a couple could experience, and are closer than ever. They've moved past their mistakes now.

The ethics are a little questionable in this story though, I know. Those are my two cents.

Not bad! Sweet and hot, just right. Plus you had other stories proceeding this one so the build up was there for the inevitable climax (sorry not sorry)

Great read.

....Awesome! Nice job man!

For someone who's never written erotic scenes before this is a great first time. (Hell, even someone who had written erotic scenes before should be happy to write something like this.)

My one criticism is that the sex isn't described in as much detail as the blowjob — still a perfectly adequate level of detail, but it feels like the story is focussing on the wrong part.

7526323 Okay, thanks for the feedback.

I think I was just trying to illustrate Fluttershy getting lost in what she was doing because she wasn't expecting to like it so much.

Thanks for the compliments though.

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Well thats the end of that. Reding other comments i hear this is your first clopfic. Please correct me if i am wrong. But damn you illustrated that so well, you have my congratulations and i cant wait to read the next fic!

Oh just checking again another chapter sweet! Lets see what happens. Though still earning my gratidude i love how close copper and shy have become.
Also another question. Forgive my memory but i dont think i remember what happened with sunny and the other girls after copper accepted them as friends. Will we see more of them?

He couldn’t risk getting her pregnant.

You know Nordryd... I think there's a possible CopperShy story you could tackle here..

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It only takes a drop of the white stuff to get a woman preggers Nordryd. Trust me, I know from experience...

There are not enough romantic stories that have what this has. No jump to the intimacy, no vulgarity/swearing, a slow tenderness, and cuddles.

Why ARE there so few intimate romances like this!?

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Because idiots just wanna masturbate to clopfics, where as this guy actually wanted to make a compelling story involving his OC, whose character has been built up over the course of several stories before this one. This makes Shining Armor and Cadance look like just friends.