Yes two characters are meant to be a mix between human and alicorn, yes they are going to be immortal, and yes they will be very strong, but their strength will start small and grow over time. And if you are going to say, this story has clichés in it, then don't, please, it's better for my head if you ignore and clichés and try to focus on the story itself.
Also there will be clop, but not to start off with.

And in that moment you've lost half your reading audience.

Well, this is the most blatant troll I've seen in years.

Well you described me almost perfectly

7060360 Or. Is. It?

*Inception bwaaaa*

Hehe, sorry but I just decided to leave a disclaimer for the fact that there will be clop, and the fact that there will be OP characters, I also stopped an earlier story because I was told it was to 'cliché', so I realized this disclaimer would be better for my sanity. I also don't care about becoming some sort of popular writer, I just want to make a story that entertains people and gives them something that they enjoy.

Intriguing, needs some grammer correction in parts, but it has got me hooked for more!

Thanks, thing like that actually make me happy to try and continue to make people happy.

This wasn't entertaining. Self-inserts and cliches don't form a good story.

It will get better and more interesting, and the main reason for the cliche warning is because I don't know what everyone considers a cliche, so if I did put one accidentally, then I didn't want to be prosecuted for it.

Okay then.

Nate himself was white with curly brown hair and brown eyes. He wore a hooded jacket with a pattern red, blue, and black as well as a black shirt that showed a wolf on a small island with trees howling at the moon. He wore his own semi-loose blue jeans and a pair of black sneakers that had a red bottom. He stood 5 foot 11 & 1/2 and while he wasn't skinny, he wasn't fat either, he also lacked the same muscle build that the stranger had.

okay. that was a little bit of a rusty description, but I can shrug it off...

Nate was meeting nine friends on this day, TJ, Jennifer, Wesley, Jacob Y, Theo, James, Jacob C, Paddie, and Larry.

t-that sure is a lot of names. But I'm sure the narrator won't take the time to describe every single one of them in the same awkward manner-

TJ was white with had curly dark brown hair and hazel eyes, stood 5 foot 7 & 1/2 and wore a open greenish hoodie that had a purple/grey striped t-shirt underneath with grey jeans and black sneakers, he was skinny and strong, even though he didn't show much muscle.
Jennifer was white with long curly blond hair and blue eyes with a ring of green around the iris, stood 5 foot 8 and wore a blue jacket over a pink sweater and blue jeans and blue shoes with green detailing, she was skinny, but still wasn't as skinny as TJ, whom she was dating.
Wesley was black with a black colored Afro and dark brown eyes, stood 5 foot 10 and wore a light yellow hoodie with blue jeans and white sneakers, he was evenly set over his body and it was always hard to tell if he had any muscle to brag about.
Jacob Y was Asian with blackish hair that went down his right eye in a very anime style, stood shorter than most his age at 5 foot 7 & 1/2 and wore a grey hoodie with blue jeans and black sneakers with green edges, he was decently round and didn't much muscle, even though he new how to fight.
Theo was white with strait dark brown hair and brownish green eyes, stood 5 foot 10 & 1/2 and wore a black hooded jacket that had a black shirt with blue jeans and completely black sneaker, he had a decent muscle build and could hold himself in a one-on-one fight.
James was black with black hair in a mini-fro and had dark brown eyes, he stood 6 foot & 1/2 and wore a rust colored hoodie with blue jeans and blue sneakers, he was more 'round' than Jacob Y and was considerably muscular.
Jacob C was white with semi-long dirty blond hair and had sky blue eyes, he stood 6 foot 1 and wore a black T-shirt with blue jeans and tan sneakers, he was thin with a decent muscle build.
Paddie was white with longish brown hair and green/brown eyes, he stood 5 foot 10 and wore a heavier tan colored coat with blue jeans and grey sneakers with a white bottom, he was averagely built but was also fairly strong.
Larry was white with short black hair and darker blue eyes, he stood 6 foot and wore a greyish black closed hoodie with blue jeans and red sneakers with black trimmings, he was semi-round but was the most muscular out of the group.

I wasn't ready for this. I wasn't ready for the slam jam.

I enjoyed it, though! Keep writing and improving, I believe in you!

Thanks, that actually makes me feel better about writing this after some of the hate, also this chapter was literally meant to be mainly the descriptive part.