Chapter 5
On the train heading into the empire Eclipse was quiet feeling quite guilty for abandoning his niece and his royal companion noticed this as behind him she was sat looking over with a worried look. “Dr. Eclipse I know you feel bad but this is probably your biggest find in the history of equestria being well a cover up makes it better.” the princess said walking up to him and putting a comforting wing around his body.
“I just abandoned my niece with a guy I barely trust in the search of a conspiracy theory that may not be real.” Eclipse sighed as he saw the station out of the window and got up to vacate his seat “Let's see if we can get any more info from the crystal library about our target because we are going into terrain that has questionable chance of survivability as well as potentially covered up secrets and die I would feel bad leaving her with a thestral that annoyed me.”
“I understand Eclipse but you knew he would make sure he'd look after her as well as making sure she got home,” I don’t think we will find anything extra in the the crystal library I would remember I um…. Read all of the books in it but they were made before the journal.” Twilight said with a nervous chuckle as she tried to keep the subject on the expedition “Also there wasn’t mention of the aperture stated in the journal but i’m sure ‘his’ library may have something.”
“Well looks like we have to head to the castle and see Princess Cadence.” Eclipse said looking towards the crystal spire as he knew who ‘he’ was.
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Meanwhile on the road Celestia’s sun bearing down on their backs Ice and Solar was making good progress towards solar’s home until a shriek came out from a certain filly “MR ICEY BAT I NEED TO EAT!” Solar was shouting as she sat down in the middle of the road and pouted in a stroppy way.
“We ate at the last town Solar birdy!” Ice said with a groan as he was getting a little annoyed with the filly as she was always hungry or tired or something that meant they had to stop and to be honest that would piss anyone off. Just saying foals and road trips are not fun. Like seriously no fun for anyone.
“But I only had a sandwich and that wasn’t tasty.” Solar said with a grumble as she was not enjoying the long journey home “Why couldn't we get a train….”
“Because where your mum lives doesn’t have a station nearby unless ponyville's which is where we was so getting a train isn’t the best option but look we are almost there Solar.” Ice said pointing to a singular house in the middle of practically nowhere “That’s the coordinates on this map look familiar dear?”
“You can read a map… wow!” Solar said with genuine surprise as suddenly out of the door came a yellow mare that scooped solar up and snuggled her “MUM PUT ME DOWN!”
“No you are never leaving my sight…. Thank you so much for bringing her home i’m Sunshine and you are?” Sunshine said looking at ice and smiling with joy in her eyes as she put her foal down. She was pretty but being a single mum in the middle of nowhere pretty didn’t do much for her but she was happy-ish.
“The name is Swift Ice just a noble thestral doing his sworn duty to help a maiden in need,” Ice said with a bow as he noticed she was very happy for him returning solar to sunshine.
“My baby brother paid you to bring her home didn’t he yes… It’s ok it’s still noble to do so as she’s a little madam dp you want to share a coffee inside.” Sunshine said with a smile as she gestured him to join her inside as Solar ran off inside. How could he refuse free coffee.
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Back in the Empire Eclipse stood before Princess cadence his left hind leg shaking visibly as he stood “Come forward Dr Darksun I heard you and Twily wanted to ask me something but then she saw Flurry and went into Aunt mode which i’m glad for a break is nice… Anyhow i guess it’s up to you what do you need to ask of me.” Cadence said as she sat down on her thrown trying to keep the meeting informal as possible she was visibly tired and dishevelled from lack of sleep. Another reason foals are evil. Like seriously evil.
“Well I’m happy you are willing to speak to me princess I won’t take up to much of your time I hope,” Eclipse said with a bow as he smiled but still visibly nervous as for what he was about to ask was a question nopony would dare to ask unless they was insane or desperate. The latter being Eclipses case “Princess Cadence me and princess twilight came here hoping to ask for permission to access the archives of king sombra.”
“Pray tell why would you ask me this… those archives contain dark magic and require use of such to even find them hence why I am wondering what possible need would you Dr. Darksun would you require such texts.” Cadence said as she was shocked to hear that request and due to the nature of what lay inside those books. Plus they was probably booby trapped.
“I know it seems strange but recently we found an ancient text preserved by magic that dated to be about 2000 years old it’s contents where stating of some sort of research department within Equestria dubbed Aperture and said Princess Celestia was involved someway,” Eclipse said with a sigh “However we can’t find hnd nor hair of this place in any files and as the dates are before sombra’s rise to power and the disappearance of the empire maybe just maybe his library might have a sliver of information in it…. And if so I hope you’ll let us investigate this as well I belive it may have been covered up in some fashion and as a historian I want to know why.” After this he stood up tall as if showing he was dedicated to his work “Please your highness let me continue my journey!”
Cadence sat there pondering for a moment looking at the unicorn stallion before her. She could see he was dedicated and was desperate to find this piece of history forgotten or hidden from the public. If her auntie hid it must’ve been something of national security but she herself was curious as to what skeletons aunt celestia had hidden away. “You shall be given passage on two conditions you take guards with you and I open and close the entrance as you go in and out.” She said in her most professional tone making Eclipse glad bowing to the oink Alicorn and leaving after thanking her….
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Yes all hail to the 'oink Alicorn'
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Didn't notice that but because it's actually funny it shall stay
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Best way to describe her in my opinion.
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Nah, swearing doesn't always mean insult as it can be used for clarification and exaggeration for sarcastic/comedic effect.
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Oh sorry but most cases of swearing used in posts on here have been rude I just assumed
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1. How the hell did you get a name like that XD
2. the chapters have been deteriorating in edits imo
3. that swearing wasn't completely necessary and borderline rude
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4. More story plz!
(5. I'd be a willing proof reader if you're looking)
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1. By choosing it
2. Editing wasn't that bad, the chapter itself was just buckets of exposition and walls of pointless text
3. Uhh being rude isn't exactly on my list of utter fears
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thanks for the interest and to be honest there are two reasons for the quality drop one is time I don't have as much as I did and get block and 2 is my co-author/editor disappeared on me
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at this point I get you don't like the story but just refrain from commenting if you'll be rude
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Dude I really liked the story, otherwise I wouldn't be following it am just saying that the last chapter wasn't the best you can do, maybe it was because of the longn hiatus it I know you can write better than that.
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Oh that's well great to know I'm going to make sure I am getting better but between writing I'm afraid a levels do take priority over this as they are important but I appreciate your honesty and sorry if I seemed touchy just the swearing at first and humbly apologise
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Alright man just keep pumping out the good stuff.
And try to relax a bit this site isn't exactly on par with Harvard when it comes to quality.
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i'm gunning for Oxford but that's the UK version
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Neat, atm am at the University Of Technology and boy do I tell you college life is waaay better
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I can't wait for university then because in uk we call college the step before uni
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Oh, nah here it's high school then uni
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we don't do it that way primary then secondary school, sixth form or college, uni
8727584
Am not sure how that translates to where I live
6 years of primary 3 middle school then 3 high school the either uni or craftsmanship school which is only 2 years
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Cool I do like seeing what it's like in other parts of the world and I can see most of the people I've reached are American
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Neat, am from Baghdad, Iraq even tho I lived in syria/Egypt for 10 years
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Oh cool I never thought mlp reached that far due to the conflict in the area tbh no offence or anything
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Honestly it probably hasn't since I got into fimfic from fallout equestrian, and I have never actually seen the show :P, also shit has calmed down significantly, at least in Baghdad thanks for the interest tho
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a goof? so he wasn't exactly supposed to be a womanizer?
Well then I think I maybe try to look at him in a different light, I just expect that those kind of characters often fit in that personality (drawer), that I often see.
Long story short, he made it look a bit like he would have a part of the personality I disliked on others and he didn't exactly made it clear to me yet that he was a goof.
Maybe his character shows better in the other chapters.
I haven'T exactly noticed that he was a former guard and everything, I just thought he was a member of a race that didn't wanted anything to do with others.
I think I haven't exactly understood which timeline or universe this is supposed to be, how the world here is supposed to look like.
I kind of hoped they were away right now, but that's okay too.
I fear no matter how hard I try or how much I'm kind of happy for the chance that Mare is getting, I can't bring myself to exactly love the character Swift Ice till now and I'm feeling bad for Eclipse having him around longer than he would want to.
I mean I hate it if chracters force themself on others no matter what they say sometimes, like when we have a main char that says no, but then we have a subcharacter who just joings them, does what she wants and get's her will everytime no matter if the main char has something against it.
Not sure if that explains it enough but normally main chars are kind of have to feel overlooked by characters with his personality.
This is a thought I only got in this chapter since I remembered a certain story, but I hope I managed to explain what I mean.
edit: However I stay at least with this story till I see if I like it or not, what you have done with Glados here.
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In original idea for Swift Ice, he was the wise guy and Eclipse was the straight man. He was formerly in the Lunar Guard but was kicked out after being caught sleeping on the job. Now he simply doesn't want to go home and be a failure in the eyes of this people.
That, I would say, sums up his personality quiet well.
All of that being said, my contribution ended after chapter two. I was simply helping The-Changeling-Alliance get his story off the ground, so whether or not Swift Ice follows any of the above is up to him. TCA's upload schedule may not be the fastest, but it is good to see that he is still working on the story.
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I'm always a PM away.
Activating tracking beacon. Let's see where this goes.
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Can I haz a comma?
This chapter is in need of editing.