A mysterious mare attacks Rainbow Dash and sends her to the hospital near death. Now, Twilight and her friends are on a mission to find the assailant and put an end to it all. New relationships form and adventures await. Will she survive?
When Twilight reaches the library, she stops just outside the door. ‘Keep it together Twilight’ she thinks before finally opening the door and walking inside. “Spike? Spike I'm home! I need to talk to you!” Twilight calls. A few seconds goes by before Spike walks out of his room and down the stairs. “Hey Twilight. What's up?” Says the little dragon. “Look, Spike....I want to apologize for the way I acted earlier. I shouldn't have yelled at you. You were just curious.” Twilight says digging at the floor with a hoof. “Yeah, what was that about?” Spike asks crossing his arms. “You'd better sit down.” She says gesturing to the stairs. The dragon sits down on the bottom step. “Alright. Now what's up?” He asks. Twilight looks away momentarily, her ears pin back. She doesn't even notice that she is biting her lip until she begins to speak. “Well, the girls and I have been at the hospital all day, we just got back from there....and....I'm afraid that.....” Twilight starts before Spike gets an uncomfortable look in his eyes. “Ooooh no.....Twilight......you're not, y'know......” Spike stutters. Twilight looks at him with a confused look. It's only when Spike makes a shape around his stomach with his claws does she understand what he is asking. At that point in time the realization hits her. Her eyes shrink to pinpricks and her ears pin back once again. “OH CELESTIA NO!!!! YEEEUGH!!!” Twilight exclaims. “Oh good.” He replies. “No, I'm not, thank Celestia. But we were at the hospital because, Rainbow Dash is in there. Somepony attacked her and hurt her pretty bad. She's alive but she keeps having a series of heart attacks. She might not make it another month.” Twilight says sadly. “OH NO! RAINBOW!” Spike exclaims. “That's why I yelled at you earlier. It's no excuse, but we were all stressed out from earlier and I just snapped. I'm sorry.” Twilight says flashing a small sheepish smile. The little dragon walks up to twilight and wraps her in a big hug. “It's alright Twilight. I don't hold grudges.” Spike replies softly. “That's why you're my number one assistant.” She smiles. “You'd better head off to bed.” Spike says. “Alright, goodnight Spike.” Twilight says. “Night Twilight.” Spike replies. The Alicorn makes her way up to her bedroom and sinks beneath the covers. The next ten minutes are spent thinking about the wounded mare that she and so many others have come to love. Twilight sniffles and soon is quietly sobbing to herself. Eventually the dark cloud that is tiredness overtakes her and she slowly drifts off to a world of slumber.
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When Twilight reached the library she stopped just outside the door. ‘Keep it together Twilight’ she thought to her herself before taking a calming breath and finally opening the door, pacing inside slowly with her body sagging from the exhaustion of the day and the talk she was about to have.
“Spike? Spike I'm home, I need to talk to you,” Twilight called into the main room, knowing it would reach his sensitive whelp ears.
A few seconds passed before Spike walked down stairs with a curious smile. “Hey Twilight, what's up?” Spike said softly as he sat on the third from bottom step.
“Look, Spike, I need to apologize for the way I acted earlier. I shouldn't have yelled at you and it was too much,” Twilight said standing at the bottom of the steps and looking at him.
“Yeah, I’m used to you freaking out, but that a bit much, even for you; what was that about?” Spike asked crossing his arms and sniffling.
Twilight looked around the library and smirked in memory of the many times Rainbow had crashed into the shelves knocking books to the floor. The parties that were had were always better when Rainbow was there, on time. Even the energy she brought to the room when she needed to have a lesson, wheather she knew it or not, were days she had looked forward to.
Twilight’s ears fell to her head and she began to subconsciously bite her bottom lip. “Well, the girls and I have been at the hospital all day and we just found out some shocking news,” she paused to compose herself with another deep inhale exhale excercise.
“We were at the hospital because Rainbow Dash has been admitted after an attack. She was seriously injured and has been having a really difficult time; we, we almost lost her, Spike,” she said softly.
Spike gasped and covered his mouth with his claws. Twilight leapt to him, embracing him into a soft hug. “She's alive, but she might not make it another month,” Twilight finished softly.
Spike sniffled and choked back tears with soft weeping sounds. “Oh no, Rainbow…”
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That’s all I could offer to fix on just half of ONE massive paragraph…
You need a PC, an editor, proofreader, and then a second editor. :)
Whoever helps you is going to need to rewrite your whole story for you to get it to rock.
At the least you need someone to properly space the story out.
7019684 I'll see what I can do to try to fix it. Thank you
7019684 Alright. I did my best in forming it into paragraphs which is difficult on my phone. Hopefully this helps you.
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... This is one paragraph... why?
That’s all I could offer to fix on just half of ONE massive paragraph…
You need a PC, an editor, proofreader, and then a second editor. :)
Whoever helps you is going to need to rewrite your whole story for you to get it to rock.
At the least you need someone to properly space the story out.