This was an interesting chapter but I wanted to ask you: what about Sunset Simmer isn't she living on Earth too? she has become very familiar with the humans after living with them for so long.

7465271 Interesting question. I don't intend on Sunset Shimmer making an appearance in this story as she lives on the Western hemisphere. Sure she has made a name for herself at Canterlot High School and weather that is in the U.S. or Canada, I'm not entirely sure, I just believe it's somewhere in North America (in my own head canon wanyway). This story may or may not end up with some references to the events of EQG or its universe but it won't play a significant part. Still, I hope you really enjoy reading this

Went a lite OCC with Big Mac there, I mean I feel him but I feel like Big Mac would be a little more nice and sedimental about it. Atleast to his sister. Oh well, no hate just saying, always happy to see an update.

At the beginning, there was far too much dialog, with very little narration. I mean, sure there might not be much to say, but you could at least perhaps list how they are saying it. Did the character sound confused? Angry? You only started getting in depth with what was happening during the call to Shining Armor.
Through most of this whole chapter it felt more like you were more stating things that happened than making it feel like they were happening. The only part where you lived up to the bar you set with your previous chapters was with Big Mac.
7477981 as far as it being out of character goes, I can't help but half dissagree. I mean, looking at how he acted, considering his reasoning, being stressed out by being trapped on a farm, never seeing anything for a change. I can actually see that happening, everypony needs a break from time to time, even from a lifestyle they love. The half part of the half dissagree comes in because, I just would expect there to be more of a reason than just being trapped on the farm for him to go off on her that much. Maybe if there were added things that were causing a lot of stress for him recently, but just that? Seems a little bit out of character with just that one thing alone.

...I was going to read this, but I am starting to feel too tired. Time to hit the hay!

*punches hay bale*

Ah, much better! Now off... to... rea-

*snores*

Okay! I'm awake again.

Now, about this chapter, it is good to see that you took my advice some with it not being as much condensed dialogue as before.

There is only one real critique I have about this, and I only noticed it twice here, but I believe I mentioned earlier how you noted, several times that: “being with Celestia improved Radius's confidence”. In earlier comments. The same applies here:

"I have not!" Celestia could tell by Shining Armor's tone that he was not being entirely truthful and decided she would bring that up near the end of the conversation.

"You know I care so much about you. I understand you're very stressed out but please stop smoking. There are so many better ways to deal with stress and we all like having you around."

And also:

"Sweet." Rainbow Dash said before taking a sip of her cider with her loyal pet tortoise on her lap. "It's been a while since I've seen some real action eh, Tank?"

The Following day which was a Thursday came and went and Rainbow Dash had used it to make preparations of her own. She needed somepony to look after Tank her pet tortoise...

It the first two, you didn't need to note that Celestia would bring up Shining quitting smoking at the end of the conversation, in the same way that you don't exactly tell a person that you are going to punch them in the face, nor would you tell your friend that your going to tell that friend that you love My Little Pony. No, you just do it.

In the second two, you noted twice that Tank is Rainbow Dash's pet tortoise. Doing so makes you seem a bit like a broken record.

My advice, for future refining, just keep an eye out for when you noted something once before, and ask yourself:

“do I need to say this again? Or is once enough?”

If the answer is “no” then remove the one(s) that you prefer less.

Huh. Big Mac feels kinda od OOC here, but that might just be me.

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Might not just be you. I've had other people mention that. My idea was to convey that BM was in need of a change of pace and really just wanted to see something or some place new for once. You may be right though, I may have made him go just a bit far.