You know those "oh. Shit." Moments? This is the perfect example.

"I'm not her marefriend. I'm her, Mother."

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Hahaha, Winter screwed flash's chick!

very few stories make me laugh but this one sure has. keep it up

Looking down at the drink I was currently holding, I figured I could have a few more. Besides, the night was young, and you only live once!

ya you only live once it's totally not like your 3rd life or something that would just be silly

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right?

Taking one of the empty velvet stools in front of the obsidian countertop, I gazed over the large selection of spirits and hard liquor on displacing on shelves against the wall behind the counter. The beer taps themselves were quite literally within arms reach as they were attached to the countertop for ease of access.

Just change the bolded words to display. Other than that, didn't see anything else that popped out to much.

Great story and glad to see a sequel to this amazing and hilarious story.

7976017 let's be honest, she deserves him as a villain

"Doesn't look like we'll get in with that line," Aurora Tempest, another one of our fellow Racers, commented dryly. Pretending that I didn't hear that, I trotted up to the stallions with my winning smile, and let's not forget about the death glares freely given from the ones stuck in line, and began to assert my authorata!

Aurora is The parallel to Alta Tempest isn't she? If not then Somepony related to Alta's parallel