I was once a normal human. Dishonorable, unclean. I went to a gathering of my former fellows, purchased something, and now, I am a Sangheili, defender of the Great Journey, in a world of human like creatures. Join me as I bring them honor.
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6738602 No Problem! keep up the good work!
6738661 Again, thanks. And since you like my displaced, how about a follow (hint hint.).
6738689 sure thing, BTW, my characters from my story are available for crossovers if you want to do one!
6738709 Copy that, and thanks for the follow. Have you read each of my displaced, which is this one, An Equestrian Spartan, A Valus Rising, a Duelist in Equestria, and The Guardian's Story?
6738719 I've read this one, The Guardian's Tale, and An Equestrian Spartan
Hmm the only true fault i can see is the first interaction with Celestia.
- I want to help you
- Ok lead on of my battalions, but i dont trust you !?
He did kill alot of sombras soldiers so i can see her giving him a chance (and Rainbow liking him becuse of actions speak louder than words) but command, maybee later.
you might want to remove the "leading" of battalion bit saying that he can join it and prove himself instead. (the crusaders was a little meeeh not bad not good.)
Other than that i feel it started of strong, more bakground on the war would bee nice (might even explain why Celestia was so fast on giving him command) but it is still early in the story so no worrys.
6739188 Thank you! Someone actually can infer!
HOW DO PEOPLE KEEP GETTING INTO MY IDEA FOULDER?!?!?!
6740163 its simple really. Google it.
I can't help but feel as if this is...rushed, somewhat. I dunno, just got that feeling.
Energy shield are only designed for high energy projectiles from weapons. The elite would be dead or dying and short a hand if this was actually applied.
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Exausted?! Dude, an Elite is closer to the equivalent of a Spartan-an army-killer. Elites don't get exhausted from fighting off a few opponents. The entire forest of timberwolves shouldn't pose a threat to him.