Pretty good story,but I a just wondering when we are going to fully get to the present?

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Most likely three or so chapters.

6903565 Oh, okay then. Have a great day mate.

somebody just rip tia's wings off and beat her to death with them, do us all a favor

6903565 This looks like something I'd like to cross with, maybe.

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You still thinking about that one?
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I wish somone would.
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You have a great day too.

“I doth remember mine sister imprisoning you.” Luna told me, interrupting what I hoped was a convincing tale. I hoped that by telling them of who I was before I took up this job, they would remember how I knew them and not seem so shocked. Which they still do.
“Oh no, she imprisoned me alright. I think it was a few days before you became Nightmare Moon, if I remember rightly. Now will you let me finish?” I asked before they both gave a nod to continue.

Add a 'not' between doth and remember in Luna's dialogue. Right now it's saying that she does remember that happening while Skye's reply makes it seem as though Luna said she doesn't remember.

I noticed there curious looks

Their not there

I expected to be at least one more plan.

'expected there to be'

I stared at Celestia, who appeared to interpret my stare correctly. She simply smiled and opened her mouth to speak, “We want thou to go out into the Everfree and locate the monsters in any way thou thinks will get the job done quickly.”
“You want me to risk myself out there … why?” I asked, forgetting about how I reassembled myself when the Jersey Devil rugby-tackled me into the wall.

Put a space between the two paragraphs.

finally realising that i had no choice in this.

Captial I instead of 'i'

i saw dead bodies and other stuff when i was small even stumbled upon the body of someone who hid in a cave to avoid british bombs in ww2 but wasnt able to get out again and i never freaked out or anything................i feel weird now