A human who gets sent to equestria by an unknown source, develops not only magic, but other powers that awaken during battles. He also has one of the strongest entities living inside of him. How will he control all these powers? Who knows.
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You sir/ma'am have made my day, because ive been looking for a boxing story or at least something close to it.
I see pontential in this i also manage to spot some errors i would recoment looking for a editor or proof reader but other then that good chapter.
What's the crossover?
what crossover you choose?
7224321 human goes to equestria
7223081 I'm a guy, and thanks for the feedback I'll make sure to fix those errors
7224389 dude tge crossover is for 2 different franchises comes together or something along the those lines
I hope more chapters will come out soon, this off to a good start.
story's good just need some practice and it will eventually get even more better
7224391 Alright, that's not a bad start. One thing I suggest is differentiating the starts of your sentences. No one wants to ready a paragraph that goes:
It does not sound nearly as intriguing as:
You need to mix words around, find ways of writing sentences so they don't always begin with 'I'. Usually you only want a sentence to begin with the same word once every three or four sentences at most, but much better if only once per paragraph. Additionally, when you do use the word 'I', always always always capitalize it.
ALWAYS.
I was not quite able to get through the first chapter, as the repetitive sentences broke the flow too much for me. Consider finding an editor, as it could help a lot with your first few dives into writing.
Welcome to Assholevile! You have your generic Bitch Rainbow to your left, a stupid crowd that gets scared of everything new to your right, and a human who gets blamed for all the world's evil in the middle.
7248446 Owell it's the same as always, I swear this guy is gonna get angry and they will become guilty or somethin.
in the description it said the infant is a filly, in I a boy or girl? other then that pace then story and I would be hooked instead of intrigued.
AW FUCKING HELL, THESE PONIES ARE SO FUCKING RACIST.!! LITERALLY THE FIRST THING THEY SEE THAT'S DIFFERENT FROM THEM, ALL HELL BREAKS LOOSE AND YOU GOT SOME ASSHAT LOOKING AT YOU LIKE YOU KILL A DOG. I love fics but, FUCK THESE PONIES BRO, LITTLE TECHNICOLOR SHITS. WHAT HAPPENED TO LOVE AND TOLERATE ALL BEINGS? I SWEAR TO GOD IF CELESTIA AND LUNA COME IN BATTLE ARMOR, THEN FUCK ALL OF YOU !!!!!!!
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I've seen this line so many times
RD is hands down the most paranoid pony ever, and possibly the most racist. I mean it, every story I've read that introduces a non-pony character, her 1st action is to attack it without reason, other then "it's different from me, so it must be a monster". Seriously, who does that?
Fucking hell Rainbow. This is why I hated her when I first watched the show.
7248446 Either your the calm version of me or I'm the loud version of you, either way we basically have the same view
Not even 2 paragraphs in and he's already injured...
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Best description ever
Truer words were never said