This may prove to be interesting,
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Literature was secret passion of the farmer's

was a secret

6472766 Oh thanks for picking that up! I write with so much caffeine in my system I miss stuff like that.

Sunset used plot flash- it's supper efective

Unsolicited typo post! Chapter 2.

“You seen the others yet today sugar?”

As per last chapter, comma-separate addressing terms even if they aren't names. I won't go on about this one any more.
“You seen the others yet today, sugar?”

stetson wearing blonde

Stetson-wearing blonde
Otherwise you have 'a stetson that is wearing something blonde'. Also Stetson is a brand and should probably be capitalised.

to connect with her midsection and double her own

to connect with her midsection and double her down/over?

To far to make an accurate shot

Too far to make an accurate shot

Pinkie being a harlot is kind of a deal breaker on a otherwise 'ok' story

6544769 Agreed. I can see Pinkie Pie being a bit free with her affection and being in it just for fun, but this is just excessive.

HiddenMaster out.

whoa
im playing dodgeball in this one

Now that's what I call "plot" armor!