The Soarindash chronicles

by MLPdior

Getting ready

"Hey twilight, open up" said rainbow. Twilight got up from reading a really great book to open the door for rainbow dash. "Okay rainbow dash, what are you doing here so early and why are you so excited".

Rainbow dash looked at twilight in a really dumb way."twilight of course you wouldn't know why I'm so excited your an egghead"

Twilight replied "tell me "

"okay down I'll tell you I got tickets for me, you, flutter shy, apple jack, rarity, and pinkie for the Wonderbolt show that's tomorrow in canterlot".

"Wow rainbow dash thanks really" said twilight.

"no problem and could you go tell the others about this and will meet tomorrow at the train station so we can leave for canterlot" said rainbow,

"okay then, bye" said twilight.

THE NEXT DAY.......

Where did they go, thought rainbow dash. As if right on cue the show up. "Hey girls ready to go" said RD.

"yes we're ready as we'll ever be" said all five ponies together.

" ALL ABOARD "said the train conductor .

"Ok girls let's go" said rainbow dash.

"Ok" said everyone.

IN THE TRAIN....

Rainbow dash was looking outside through a window thinking about the show. Then she heard the train whistle blow, which meant their in canterlot.

Author's Note:

Hello everybody,
This my first soarindash story so please don't hate but helpful comments will be appreciated.
Please like, follow, and comment.
I will update later on today or tomorrow
Bye for now

Comments

[HarmonyTouch]

Its a little rushed

[Prism Shine]

This was really rushed.

Also, there's a LOT of grammar mistakes here.

If you want, I can help you pre-read your upcoming chapters and probably make them longer.

[CP_BEN]

It needs a little polishing.

[Phoenix Nebula]

Wow umm... I don't want to be rude but this was worse than my first story. I do however like the concept of what you have planed.

[Crystal Bullet]

This is a good start for your FIRST EVER STORY!
Although it needs a little more time to recheck and re-recheck this story, I think it has a very creative plot. I'm sure it'll be better if you spend more time reading this again and again before you submit it.
Keep on going!

[SuicidalAngel]

I finally found it! Yay!!This was a pretty great start, a few grammar errors and a bit rushed, but overall ok for a first story!