I don't even remember there was second version of this chapter. I hope that right now, the continuation will go smoothly, and we won't have to wait a year for 1K words.
This is definitely different. To need the necessities of mortal life, yet never dying if denied them. The pain you must have to go through. So, I guess we'll find out about this 'Throne' in the next chapter or two.
Luna, her face etched with concern, turned to Twilight “I need to tell Celestia of this. Please, take her to the hospital and see what they can do about her while I speak with my sister.”
Twilight quickly nodded, carefully lifting the sickly nightmare, and swiftly made her way to the hospital. Luna then took off into the night sky, intent on heading towards Canterlot.
Now in the beginning of this chapter:
Suppressing a shudder, Luna motioned for Redheart to lead her to the hospital.
"Sparkle? I need you to write a letter to my sister. I urgently need her here, but do not tell her of the Nightmare, I will do that myself. Please join us when you are finished. I need the rest of you girls to make sure everypony in town is okay, and see if you can convince them to return and help clean up the festivities.
Could use a bit of editing here and there; some words missing in places, some misspelled, when the doctor comes in no " at yhe end of his words to indicate he'd stopped talking before narrative started again, nothing to show a change of perspective from nightmare's view to twilight and Luna's and the way Luna call twi sparkle feels weird and kinda unfriendly... but i still enjoyed this rewrite. Pleasedon't take my criticisms too hard.
While I have been patiently waiting for this I am afraid I must drop this. The progress is much to slow and I have far to many as it is in the "waiting to finish" area. :(
8356902 Don't take my post too hard to heart. I had at, the time, just went through and seen 20+ stories in my waiting list that have been sitting in there with no updates for over a year and I saw that my list of waiting is 240+ so I was just upset and removing stories that seem like they are not going to progress or will hit "permanent" hiatus status. By upset I mean... the stories are progressing very slowly or NOT at all in some cases.
Nothing personal against the authors, It is just pragmatism on my end. I have read too many stories only to have them die in the middle. Some stories the authors have either written themselves into a corner but, refuse to fix the story to progress, or they have run out of ideas and refuse to ask for the readers opinions, or they have asked and the opinions are NOT where the author wants to take the story, or any other reason personal or not.
Hmmm unending hunger and thrist you know Nightmare is best Vamppony
The Elements seem to have a bit of a cruel streak.
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Read closer, it implies that some third party did the judging.
7071032 Huh, you're right. Someone else apparently needs a good Friendship-lasering.
I don't even remember there was second version of this chapter.
I hope that right now, the continuation will go smoothly, and we won't have to wait a year for 1K words.
quiet
I can't put into words how much this common mistake irks me.
7071817 I should probably structure that paragraph better. Twilight is the one who's a vampony.
I sure hope chapter 2 can come out a LOT sooner then this one did. I forgot about this story until I saw it updated, that's not good!
Interesting, can't wait for the next chapter
7072739 same. and i didn't even realize what it was til i looked closely at the description again
an interesting furtherment, though. I'm curious to see where else this goes
I just finished both chapters and already salivating, yes salivating, for more!
more please.
7761206 I will eventually get around to adding more to this
It's just hard for me to figure out where to go with it
*Cave echoes* Hello? Is there a new chapter yet?....yet.....yet....
This is definitely different. To need the necessities of mortal life, yet never dying if denied them. The pain you must have to go through. So, I guess we'll find out about this 'Throne' in the next chapter or two.
7769174 *Cave answers* It has been rewritten... written... written...
This was at the end of the prologue:
Now in the beginning of this chapter:
See the discrepancy?
8067363 Danke mein Freund
I have fixed it!
Could use a bit of editing here and there; some words missing in places, some misspelled, when the doctor comes in no " at yhe end of his words to indicate he'd stopped talking before narrative started again, nothing to show a change of perspective from nightmare's view to twilight and Luna's and the way Luna call twi sparkle feels weird and kinda unfriendly... but i still enjoyed this rewrite. Pleasedon't take my criticisms too hard.
Looking forward to the real next chapter
nice work
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My vote is for Redemption Fic!
While I have been patiently waiting for this I am afraid I must drop this. The progress is much to slow and I have far to many as it is in the "waiting to finish" area. :(
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am sorry, writing is just hard for me...
trying to get back into it now
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Don't take my post too hard to heart. I had at, the time, just went through and seen 20+ stories in my waiting list that have been sitting in there with no updates for over a year and I saw that my list of waiting is 240+ so I was just upset and removing stories that seem like they are not going to progress or will hit "permanent" hiatus status. By upset I mean... the stories are progressing very slowly or NOT at all in some cases.
Nothing personal against the authors, It is just pragmatism on my end. I have read too many stories only to have them die in the middle. Some stories the authors have either written themselves into a corner but, refuse to fix the story to progress, or they have run out of ideas and refuse to ask for the readers opinions, or they have asked and the opinions are NOT where the author wants to take the story, or any other reason personal or not.
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You can do it!
rereading this now found this the Nightmare reincanated, [reincarnated] glad to see you're back