We always see these people-turned-pony dealing with their appocalyptic situations in the relative comfort of their own homes/bases...but what if you're not at home when all of humanity disappears and you're left as a cute little pony in a bad place.
So many rich new characters being added to the world it's awesome.
So, word of advice on switching between POVs: if you want to write that sort of switch, you're going to want the text itself to be so smooth as to tell the reader who's new perspective we're in without having to put the "Character's POV:" message at the beginning of a section. Just have a divider (I use three asterisks), and write from somebody else's perspective.
Similarly, it's usually for the best NOT to switch between first and third person. Published stories are always consistent. Generally, first person perspective stories remain in the perspective of one character for the whole book. Third person stories are allowed to switch if they're the limited perspective (it's a pretty meaningless switch if they're omniscient perspective.
I enjoyed this chapter for what it was, but that's something I would keep in mind for next time. Write in such a way that we don't need those messages and never include them. Just divide the scene and let us figure them out. Similarly, I would use as few switches as possible (one, maybe two switches per chapter) so that the audience doesn't get confused.
Either that, or use an omniscient perspective, so you can switch between whoever you want at will. Just my two sense on some writing stuff. The kinds of things I wish people had told me about ten years ago.
Keep up the good work, though!
(and on a totally unrelated note, in the Ponies After People story, vehicles piloted by humans vanished with their drivers when everybody dissapeared, so there wouldn't be cars exploding everywhere. The only exception would be if someone left behind was on them, in which case the vehicle would remain behind, so the pony doesn't get dropped out of the sky from atop it. Obviously you can do what you want, I just thought I'd mention what happened there.)
Damn, you're just giving me all the ponies I could find. These two will be written in for a later chapter.
6066236 Sweet, I can't wait to see what you come up with.
So many rich new characters being added to the world it's awesome.
So, word of advice on switching between POVs: if you want to write that sort of switch, you're going to want the text itself to be so smooth as to tell the reader who's new perspective we're in without having to put the "Character's POV:" message at the beginning of a section. Just have a divider (I use three asterisks), and write from somebody else's perspective.
Similarly, it's usually for the best NOT to switch between first and third person. Published stories are always consistent. Generally, first person perspective stories remain in the perspective of one character for the whole book. Third person stories are allowed to switch if they're the limited perspective (it's a pretty meaningless switch if they're omniscient perspective.
I enjoyed this chapter for what it was, but that's something I would keep in mind for next time. Write in such a way that we don't need those messages and never include them. Just divide the scene and let us figure them out. Similarly, I would use as few switches as possible (one, maybe two switches per chapter) so that the audience doesn't get confused.
Either that, or use an omniscient perspective, so you can switch between whoever you want at will. Just my two sense on some writing stuff. The kinds of things I wish people had told me about ten years ago.
Keep up the good work, though!
(and on a totally unrelated note, in the Ponies After People story, vehicles piloted by humans vanished with their drivers when everybody dissapeared, so there wouldn't be cars exploding everywhere. The only exception would be if someone left behind was on them, in which case the vehicle would remain behind, so the pony doesn't get dropped out of the sky from atop it. Obviously you can do what you want, I just thought I'd mention what happened there.)
Sunny had snuggled up close to her in the night and was still fast asleep
But on the way there she suddenly vanished, leaving him alone there in the car.