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Shaddup Pip you know you love it.

Okay a couple things.

"Gay horse blinders." Scootaloo reminded.

Oh my god that is the funniest line. Immediately set an image in my mind and it's just plain silly.

"Holy shit your dick is so small! Exclaimed Scootaloo.

Scootaloo pls.

Lastly, there are a couple issues with proper nouns, things not capitalized or having the right possession apostrophe added. For example:

"Rumble stuck his tongue out at Scootaloo, then, turned his head and licked up Pipsqueaks meager length in one long smooth lick.
"Oooh!" Pipsqueak gasped, his little dick twitching in response to rumbles tongue.

This error happens a lot.

But other than that, it was a very enjoyable chapter :D

Nice second chapter and seeing this is not 'complete'... you plan more? Maybe getting Pip as their fucktoy\fuckbuddy? Scoots get to try kinky stuff, Rumble gets stallion bitch to rut and Pip gets his lovely sexy dominant Rumble to fuck him silly. Everypony wins!

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uhf, now mine too, you have any recommendations?

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....my approval. All of my approval.

>continuing
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awwww but then what no more of what the images had to offer and it was just more plain sex? lame :/ .....

Might could use another editing pass. It's hot, and seeing it continue makes me happy, but every once in a while a bunch of punctuation would be missing and it would kick me right back out as I figured out why it looked wrong.

So happy that that this is continuing... We all know what Scoot's got in mind ;) Could use another proofread, but otherwise, it was hot, and I loved it.

Moar?

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Patience! I'm also working on other, new stories at the moment.

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Moar. My patience can only hold for so long.