Derpy isn't perfect, nopony is after all. Yet she still can't hide the feeling that she isn't loved. Calvin, a human who has stayed with the kind mare for a year now has always been there for Derpy when she needed it.
5613869 Ahh. Yeah writers block sux...if I could stick to a story and not lose it, I could make some great ones. Good drama Romance Action (in more ways than 1 )
But I can't focus on it enough...damn my ADHD...damn it to hell!!!!!!!!
Yours is light, and you can go back and forth at least. Me? I have thought of 60 different fic ideas and made 2-3 2000 word chapters easy but I lose my focus and go t another one...but I could never REALLY write (or type) it out...I lose it faster, and I rethink things many different ways. I can't focus on one story line, I make a story WEB!!!!
5614295 Way to get me right away. What I do is I type it whenever an idea strikes me so I don't lose it. Or just find a piece of paper and scribble it down while you're on the toilet like me.
“I think we’re gonna have fun during the storm this weekend.” She purred as Calvin shuddered in anticipation.
She nipped his ear and exited the house with Dinky in tow.
you write such things pretty good. (what i try to say with my poor english is, that there are some scenes i don´t like, but you make it pretty enjoyable?! for me. Normally i would like to know a bit about them befor they start the romance, but since i know Derpy more or less (because i don´know your Derpy), i can see she is nice and she is acting pretty average i guess, and i still have to learn about your Human here, but even he seems to be nice enough. Long story short, i think i like both of your characters, and even if i prefer a slowly development in their relationship, i like it how you do it too.
I would like it if the story would have a slower pace, but since you already started this way, i guess i prefer it like this.
5613869
Ahh. Yeah writers block sux...if I could stick to a story and not lose it, I could make some great ones.
Good drama
Romance
Action (in more ways than 1 )
But I can't focus on it enough...damn my ADHD...damn it to hell!!!!!!!!
5614269
Welcome to the club
5614274
Yours is light, and you can go back and forth at least.
Me? I have thought of 60 different fic ideas and made 2-3 2000 word chapters easy but I lose my focus and go t another one...but I could never REALLY write (or type) it out...I lose it faster, and I rethink things many different ways. I can't focus on one story line, I make a story WEB!!!!
5614295
Way to get me right away. What I do is I type it whenever an idea strikes me so I don't lose it. Or just find a piece of paper and scribble it down while you're on the toilet like me.
Megusta
PLEASE MORE!!!!!!!!
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Glad you enjoy it!
Damn you, Dinky! Why you gotta be so adorable! My heart can only take so much!
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Then have a set of defibrillators on hoof because it only gets cuter from here.
5614396 Any brony that knows his stuff has one and plenty of insulin on hand. I'll endure.
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Not all. I have nothing for health, and life preservation. Except for bandages...well "band-aids" that is...
5614396
You and your ability to create the feels...you are gonna kill me, I swear that you are...
I must go kill some Templars to forget the feels, and REsuppress my feelings.
5616647 Then you might want to get those before your heart explodes from the daww.
you write such things pretty good. (what i try to say with my poor english is, that there are some scenes i don´t like, but you make it pretty enjoyable?! for me.
Normally i would like to know a bit about them befor they start the romance, but since i know Derpy more or less (because i don´know your Derpy), i can see she is nice and she is acting pretty average i guess, and i still have to learn about your Human here, but even he seems to be nice enough.
Long story short, i think i like both of your characters, and even if i prefer a slowly development in their relationship, i like it how you do it too.
I would like it if the story would have a slower pace, but since you already started this way, i guess i prefer it like this.
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I totally see what you mean. As with most of my stories, quick romance, more details come to light, plot twist ensues, profit, etc.
Encore!
This is pretty good. The pacing is a little fast but its still good,
nice
You miss the letter R in (he name is sparkler)if someone told you already then don't mean me