Derpy isn't perfect, nopony is after all. Yet she still can't hide the feeling that she isn't loved. Calvin, a human who has stayed with the kind mare for a year now has always been there for Derpy when she needed it.
A potion for weight loss, that make him look like he-man and it even enlarges his junk? I don't know where you are going with this, but I'm not sure if I like it... But i will stick to it, it's still a lovely story :)
It would have been more amusing, (at least to me), if Derpy DIDN'T like the new body. But still, short and sweet. I liked this chapter as much as the next person. Looking forward to moar.
Great short chapter! Could have been longer, also... ( This is kinda perverted, but I'm confused) Did he gain an extra 8 inches from what he had, or did it grow up to 8 inches?
Ok you need to make this clearer when people start reading, this is pure smut.
Now there is no problem in just that respect, but the fact is that it started out as something that looked like it was going to focus more on story. To me this turn if events between this and the last chapter made the portrayals of the characters feel like completely different one than introduced initially.
I feel mislead, so unfortunately a downvote is the result. Look into either rewriting these chapters or the beginning and set the characters up differently.
A potion for weight loss, that make him look like he-man and it even enlarges his junk?
I don't know where you are going with this, but I'm not sure if I like it...
But i will stick to it, it's still a lovely story :)
Oh, boy! I love smut!
5702517 indeed
can I get some of that potion hehehe
It would have been more amusing, (at least to me), if Derpy DIDN'T like the new body.
But still, short and sweet. I liked this chapter as much as the next person. Looking forward to moar.
Great short chapter! Could have been longer, also... ( This is kinda perverted, but I'm confused) Did he gain an extra 8 inches from what he had, or did it grow up to 8 inches?
I live for smut!!!
Okay, just went from kind of creepy to just ewwww. I'm not judging anyone who likes this story, but this just isn't my cup of tea.
I thought it was a trick and the potion was a roofie
Ok you need to make this clearer when people start reading, this is pure smut.
Now there is no problem in just that respect, but the fact is that it started out as something that looked like it was going to focus more on story. To me this turn if events between this and the last chapter made the portrayals of the characters feel like completely different one than introduced initially.
I feel mislead, so unfortunately a downvote is the result. Look into either rewriting these chapters or the beginning and set the characters up differently.