“That was the most amazing sex I’ve ever had!” Derpy panted. "and we only needed two minutes"
I don´t know, the first time that i got the feeling, they probably not even were busy for more then one or two minutes.

“Wow Mom, I didn’t know you were such a monster in the sack! I’m not even scared, I’m actually impressed you managed to seduce a human, one of the densest creatures known to pony kind! And a fat human too” A new voice reached Calvin’s ears

okay i allready hate that Sparkling, i am not sure how to describe it, but even withouth her calling him fat, she seems to be pretty mean, i honestly don´t want to tell anyone what they should like and what not, but the part with her was pretty weird for me.

I haven´t seen much clopfics here, and i prefer them with a bit more story in it (not just the clop), but this was probably not the best clopscene. Sorry i don´t want to be mean, but i don´t know how to say it otherwise, this chapter was not my favourite.

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I get it. Thanks for the feedback! I'll work on that the next time there is a clop scene, I usually write better smut but I'll probably edit it when I get a chance.

Awwwwwkwaaaaaaaarrrrrrrrrrd... ( ._.)

Also, nice connection between two stories, even though the chapter to the other was just done recently

MEGUSTA PLEASE KEEP GOING!!!!!

YYYYEEEEEAAAAAHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!

I loved it! Could you, maybe, add more "details" to these "scenes" please?

Also, Sparkler says: "and a fat human too!"
How fat is Calvin?
1-10
1 being kinda chubby to 10 being Obese?

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Like me around a 4-5 ish range

5630316 Oh. Ok. Though, maybe he could lose weight throughout the story? That would help you with continuing the story! ( You know, because Calvin is eating healthier due to the fact that he can't eat meat in equestria, considering it would be a crime against Pony kind.)

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way to spoil it

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She took that well. I would want to bleach my eye's out if I saw my mom in the through s of passion.

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I have only read this far.
But the detail that you brought up and the fact that Sparkler is allready an adult (How old is Derpy anyway?), leads me to think that Sparkler might not be Derpy's biological daughter. (Did I predict a plot twist? )

It's funny at the great job

Hmm so fucking rushed