I have to admit that i rather like the concept behind this story, but the backstory feels way to rushed. I would advice you to stretch out the flashback backstory to 2 or 3 chapters and then continue with the present time. Also, you really should use commas more often. All in all, i look forward to seeing where this is going. Best of luck to you :)

it seems a little rushed but i like it.

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'Hey dad is there any other way for me to hard my dark magic

(Alright little side note, I am NOT going to be describing how they look cause honestly if you don't know what they look like and your on this site just leave right now. P.S. I apologize if Aj's accent isn't exactly right but hey at least I'm trying. That is all.)

Atleast one person agrees with me and isn't afraid to say it.

Okay, one sentence into this crap and I'm done. After surviving the rushed nonsensical horror that was the first chapter I thought It would improve....
Nope.
Both Sombra and Celestia are horribly OOC, Sombra would never talk like that, he is a King not some modern moron, and Celestia is too cruel but not done right enough to be Tyrantestia or xenolestia.

Que the butt hurt fanboys who can't tell a good story from a bad one, dislikes ahoy!