A Naruto crossover. When Sunset Shimmer went through the mirror, it brought her from her world of peaceful quadrupeds, to one of warrior bipeds. Now she needs to figure out a way to fit in, and fast.
I wonder when Sunset will be honest with Naruto... I mean the guy is such a ray of sunshine (no pun intended) he makes his active enemies his friends in some cases, and Sunset might be somewhere between neutral and against him.
5745144 Just before the Exams start. This makes Naruto 12-13, and Sunset's human form about 14. Might seem like an early place to situate this, but by Equestrian standards (and mentally) Sunset is an adult, and this gives her a special perspective. Also, I need plenty of time for the villains' plan to form and come to fruition.
5745151 Hey, Equestia is a rather sugar coated world...sometimes literally. I can't imagine they would have very powerful drugs. The Elemental Nations, on the other hand...It seemed to make sense when I wrote it, lol.
5745173 I technically needed to bump it up due to the tub scene. Highest you can go with T rating is supposed to be 'implied' sexual acts. This was a bit over implied. And yes, Sunset will change her ways. But it will take some introspection on her part, as she sees (second-hand) what she's becoming...make of that what you will lol.
During the exams, Sunset is about to get a sobering lesson on just what kind of world she has entered, especially if the Invasion and such still happens. I'm guessing at this point she will see Naruto's battle with Gaara, including summoning Gamabunta and the combination transformation into the Kyuubi (or at least a giant fox). The sheer violence combined with Gaara's aura of pure malice at that time should open here eyes to just how far she is in over her head. That's my guess for the time being at least.
I am enjoying this story and I do hope that you continue it.
5745254 My first time actually describing a sexual act in-story. 48 stories of various categories. 627,819 total words published. My first described sexual act and it's an MLP story...I don't know if that's highly amusing or mildly disturbing...
5745289 To be honest, I wasn't going to add the tub scene in...then I remembered making the joke about Sunset being a cheap drunk, and a total lightweight when it came to drugs and alcohol. Then I figured...eh, why not?
Well I wasn't expecting to see this updated, but it was okay. Though honestly I'm wondering what exactly can happen in this story. Sunset as it stands has no powers and likely couldn't be trained fast enough, so fighting is out. Magic doesn't exist in the ninja world and there is no way for her to access it.
I'm just guessing this will probably be a relatively short story of some kind. Just asking cause I'm not sure how far this story could go based on it's premise. Though I don't mean that in a bad or rude way, just asking.
Sunset as it stands has no powers and likely couldn't be trained fast enough, so fighting is out. Magic doesn't exist in the ninja world and there is no way for her to access it.
Oh, there is a way. Just not yet. But in order to access it, I require someone/s who are old enough, and well versed in various magics. But WHO? WHO could I POSSIBLY use???
5745506 Quite Possibly. And I feel there will be more in the future. That said, I refuse to let this story become just a smut-fic. Don't get me wrong, I love me some smut. However, I care about the story itself more.
5745819 Not my style. Some people might like that, but I do not. I think sex can enhance a story, but unlike some authors who I won't name on here, I believe a story should be ABLE to stand on its own merits without it. But again, I have nothing against some raunchiness in a fic. It's just my opinion.
5745838 It was just a suggestions but you do have a point. However I do hope that any further raunchiness in your story will result in extremely funny and awkward situations.
5745885 Oh, have no doubt. There may not be any actual intercourse between Naruto and Sunset for quite a while, but amusing and awkward situations shall abound.
5745920 Reminds me of this one fanfic that started during the beetle mission with Team 8 in which Naruto saw Hinata naked, Hiashi and Tsunade found out and due to some old Hyuuga Tradition the two genin had to get married.
As you would expect that led to a lot of extremely funny, weird and awkward situations. I got to go and see if I can find it again.
Also should I be expecting for our dear little Sunset to take advantage of Hinata's crush on Naruto for her own gain due to the Hyuuga clan's status?
5745497 Have her be visited by Hagoromo? He has been around for a verrry long time,might not be the first time he has seen a Equestrian, maybe just give her a very subtle hint, don't even have to say it is him, and have Sunset try it out, wondering where it came from, it could be a test run of what would happen if he had given both of his sons power (Sunset's personality at the moment kind of resembles Indra's, thinking that power is what is needed in the world.) I really don't want her to rely on the Sirens.
Well given the rather explicit content of this chapter, is it any surprise? I mean really? If it hadn't gone into so much detail a teen rating could have probably but it but the more, well, mature nature of it sorta warrants the bump in rating, don't you think?
Will sunset be evil then good or succumb to darkness like a certain shinobi cuz I hope that doesn't happen since I read every fic that involves her losing it and die
Well i noticed you have the main six as character tags for your story....are they going to come in in a couple of years or what? Also will they be from pony world or from this one like Equestria girls?
I wonder when Sunset will be honest with Naruto... I mean the guy is such a ray of sunshine (no pun intended) he makes his active enemies his friends in some cases, and Sunset might be somewhere between neutral and against him.
5745105 It will come. Naruto won't be the only one changed by the upcoming Chuunin exams.
5745128 Where are we Naruto-Timeline wise anyway?
Well now! This was quite an interesting chapter in my opinion. Yeesh! Some medications huh? Lol. Great work! Keep it up!
5745144 Just before the Exams start. This makes Naruto 12-13, and Sunset's human form about 14. Might seem like an early place to situate this, but by Equestrian standards (and mentally) Sunset is an adult, and this gives her a special perspective. Also, I need plenty of time for the villains' plan to form and come to fruition.
5745151 Hey, Equestia is a rather sugar coated world...sometimes literally. I can't imagine they would have very powerful drugs. The Elemental Nations, on the other hand...It seemed to make sense when I wrote it, lol.
5745167 Heh. True enough. Anyways, quick question, any reason why this fic is now M? Just curious is all. And will Sunset change her ways in due time?
5745173 I technically needed to bump it up due to the tub scene. Highest you can go with T rating is supposed to be 'implied' sexual acts. This was a bit over implied. And yes, Sunset will change her ways. But it will take some introspection on her part, as she sees (second-hand) what she's becoming...make of that what you will lol.
5745184 Huh. Very interesting! I'm definitely looking forward to the next chapter now! Good luck!
5745184 A certain white snake?
5745192 I can neither confirm nor deny that one run-away, power hungry student will have any effect on another...and please stay out of my head!
During the exams, Sunset is about to get a sobering lesson on just what kind of world she has entered, especially if the Invasion and such still happens. I'm guessing at this point she will see Naruto's battle with Gaara, including summoning Gamabunta and the combination transformation into the Kyuubi (or at least a giant fox).
The sheer violence combined with Gaara's aura of pure malice at that time should open here eyes to just how far she is in over her head. That's my guess for the time being at least.
I am enjoying this story and I do hope that you continue it.
5745173
Do you really need to ask after this chapter?
Well that was unexpected, and by THAT I mean, well you know what I mean.
But I wonder how the rest of Team 7 will react to Sunset.
5745249 Hey I just wanted to make sure is all! Geez. Cut me some slack.
5745254 My first time actually describing a sexual act in-story. 48 stories of various categories. 627,819 total words published. My first described sexual act and it's an MLP story...I don't know if that's highly amusing or mildly disturbing...
Great chapter. I didn't expected the bathroom scene but I found it hilarious the way Sunset made Naruto faint.
5745289 To be honest, I wasn't going to add the tub scene in...then I remembered making the joke about Sunset being a cheap drunk, and a total lightweight when it came to drugs and alcohol. Then I figured...eh, why not?
5745201 Tooooooo laaaaaaaaate.....
5745433 NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Well I wasn't expecting to see this updated, but it was okay. Though honestly I'm wondering what exactly can happen in this story. Sunset as it stands has no powers and likely couldn't be trained fast enough, so fighting is out. Magic doesn't exist in the ninja world and there is no way for her to access it.
I'm just guessing this will probably be a relatively short story of some kind. Just asking cause I'm not sure how far this story could go based on it's premise. Though I don't mean that in a bad or rude way, just asking.
5745477
Oh, there is a way. Just not yet. But in order to access it, I require someone/s who are old enough, and well versed in various magics. But WHO? WHO could I POSSIBLY use???
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WHO, I ASK?!
(ps, I don't mean this mean-spiritedly. My point is, there is quite a few options for where I can take this, so don't go assuming)
5745276
I would say that it's both for a number of reasons.
5745506 Quite Possibly. And I feel there will be more in the future. That said, I refuse to let this story become just a smut-fic. Don't get me wrong, I love me some smut. However, I care about the story itself more.
5745514
You could do what the author of 'The Chase' does and write them separately.
Like the T-rated Daybreak and the M-rated Daybreak: Icha Icha Days or something.
5745819 Not my style. Some people might like that, but I do not. I think sex can enhance a story, but unlike some authors who I won't name on here, I believe a story should be ABLE to stand on its own merits without it. But again, I have nothing against some raunchiness in a fic. It's just my opinion.
5745838
It was just a suggestions but you do have a point. However I do hope that any further raunchiness in your story will result in extremely funny and awkward situations.
5745885 Oh, have no doubt. There may not be any actual intercourse between Naruto and Sunset for quite a while, but amusing and awkward situations shall abound.
5745920
Reminds me of this one fanfic that started during the beetle mission with Team 8 in which Naruto saw Hinata naked, Hiashi and Tsunade found out and due to some old Hyuuga Tradition the two genin had to get married.
As you would expect that led to a lot of extremely funny, weird and awkward situations. I got to go and see if I can find it again.
Also should I be expecting for our dear little Sunset to take advantage of Hinata's crush on Naruto for her own gain due to the Hyuuga clan's status?
5745497 Have her be visited by Hagoromo? He has been around for a verrry long time,might not be the first time he has seen a Equestrian, maybe just give her a very subtle hint, don't even have to say it is him, and have Sunset try it out, wondering where it came from, it could be a test run of what would happen if he had given both of his sons power (Sunset's personality at the moment kind of resembles Indra's, thinking that power is what is needed in the world.) I really don't want her to rely on the Sirens.
5747169 Who said anything about 'relying' on the Sirens? They are antagonists in this story. They do what they do for their gain, not Sunset's.
5745273
Well given the rather explicit content of this chapter, is it any surprise? I mean really? If it hadn't gone into so much detail a teen rating could have probably but it but the more, well, mature nature of it sorta warrants the bump in rating, don't you think?
5747354 Well...hm. Touché!
Heh you can't lie to us sunset, we know Your warming up to naruto you sneaky mare
5747309 So, was the magic a hypothetical answer to the person you were quoting?
5747834 No. I'd explain fully, but that would ruin most of the story, because it's a major plot point.
Great fic so when's the next update
I hope you update your previous works as well
Can't wait for an update! Seriously!
5747385 Naruto gets all the girls didn't you know that??
Will sunset be evil then good or succumb to darkness like a certain shinobi cuz I hope that doesn't happen since I read every fic that involves her losing it and die
5987775 She's not exactly evil. More of an entitled Brat.
5988446 Just wondering
Which one will you update next?
P.S sorry if I bothered U
6112003 Working on both this and Fox in Equestria. Just depends on what I get more inspiration for.
6134596
I wonder what you'll surprise us with next time
Nonetheless I'm a patient man
6134642 Well, I hope it is pleasantly surprising. I have big plans for Daybreak, AND Fox in Equestria.
6134697
I'll be waiting for it
Well i noticed you have the main six as character tags for your story....are they going to come in in a couple of years or what?
Also will they be from pony world or from this one like Equestria girls?
6180893 the plan is for Equestria's fate to become intertwined with the nations. Consequently, there will be at least one other human/pony pairing.
6181511 Now that is something we would all like to see