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Don't disappoint me.

This story looks interesting.

The title intrigued me... but now... I dunno... I'll watch this for now.

Mmm...Bacon flavored ramen.

I think I'm completely, utterly burnt out on annoying-loudmouth-convinces-jaded-semi-evil-person-to-turn-over-new-leaf-with-his-earnest-and-naive-ways Naruto stories, but if it's not just following that deeply trod path I'd be interested in more.

Darn it you beat me to it, I'm currently working on writing my own Sunset Shimmer goes to Konoha but it's the one from that holiday special comic. Honestly it feels like one of those Naruto gets fend up/betrayed and leaves Konoha fics.

Anyway I'm looking forward to more of this, I wonder how long it will take for Naruto to drive Sunset nuts.

BTW I tried to add this story to the Naruto group but I can't for some reason.

5482828 You couldn't get it added because Karasu87 already did lol. He can also attest to the fact that I've been working on this for a LONG time. The only reason I got it out so quickly was because nobody bothered to check out the new Chapter of Shinobi of Equestria I posted like, 2 weeks ago, and I was somewhat miffed. lol.

5481683 There will be hints of that, but not too much, don't worry.

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Well in my defense it wasn't showing up at first anyway. Also the story I plan/want to write is focused on Sunset from IDW's comic EQG holiday special in which she is accused of stealing and spreading secrets and treated as such, even by her so-called friends and unable to deal with it she leaves using a spell she picked up on the portal and ends up in Naruto's world. Problem is I can't decide which point in the timeline I should put her in. Pre-start and have her end up raising Naruto? Meeting/joining Sasuke in between Part 1 and 2 or post-war? Honestly I can see Sunset and Naruto have a close-sibling type of relationship for some reason.

Nonetheless this story looks very promising. Just one quick question: are there going to be human/ninja counterparts to the ponies?

5483642 Haven't decided on that yet. I decided to go Pre-Chuunin exams for time-line in mine, as I want Sunset herself to draw parallels between herself and a certain 'former-student gone bad' in the Naruto-verse, and that influences much of her decisions later. As for yours, I would say that you should come up with an overlying plot first, and then decide which time would best suit her arrival. I guess just consider which makes, to you, a more compelling thing to write.

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To be honest they all sound to be quiet compelling to write, I mean Sunset having to raise/look after Naruto and see him being hated for something he didn't do while she was hated for things she did. Or have her join Sasuke and watch him descend deeper and deeper into darkness and madness. Or perhaps join him on his quest for redemption and learn what a true friend is. Hmm I could give both a try.

Also if you do decide to add human/ninja counterparts then can you consider giving them more native names. Just a suggestion.
And yeah I would love to see how Sunset would react to meeting someone like Orochimaru. Or Nagato. Or Obito. Is it just me or has there been some sort of curse of teacher vs student/sibling student vs sibling student coming down from Sarutobi and his team? Think about it: Sarutobi* fought Orochimaru, Jiraiya* fought Nagato, Minato* fought Obito, and Kakashi fought Sasuke. *All three died because of it for one reason or another. Orochimaru and Jiraiya fought, Kakashi fought Obito, and Naruto fought against both Nagato and Sasuke.

Man is Sunset going to have a lot to think about. Depending on how your story goes.

5483829 I know. And that's BEFORE MLP villains get thrown in the mix. The Dazzlings will make a significant plot relative appearance/s (though this won't turn into a song-fic), and Sunset will be bringing Naruto to Equestria later. I got the entire plot of the entire story ironed out, but for a few details. The problem is going to be getting my ideas from my brain to the computer screen, as usual.

But again, I was disappointed that this got so much more attention than Shinobi of Equestria did. Starting a major arc for that story, whereas this story itself is just getting released.

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True or you get a good idea/scene but can't find the chance to write down and once you sit down to write you draw a blank. I can't help but wonder how Naruto's time in Equestria will go in this story.

And I'm guessing this story is getting more attention because it has Sunset going to Naruto's world instead of Naruto or other character going to Equestria.

5484476 That could be, but Shinobi of Equestria has Gaara being possessed by the dual efforts of Shukaku and the Nightmare Forces in an 'enemy of my enemy' scenario, Luna's been hospitalized from the attack, and Celestia is literally spitting fire...To be honest, the biggest problem people have isn't the plot, it's the fact that I'm only giving Naruto Pinkie and AJ for the pairing.

I just have way too many ideas at this point. I really should work on Fox in Equestria : Revamped, but am lacking the focus to stay on that. This fic and SoE are gonna eat me alive I think.

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Hmmm that does sound really interesting about Gaara being possessed. The pairing bit, yeah that would play a huge factor in a story's popularity and whatnot. I will admit that I stopped reading some good Naruto fanfiction because of the pairing aside from character bashing and just bad plot or writing style.

But anyway I'm not going to hound you over the pairings for this story or any of your others, mainly because NaruHina is canon , but anyway for this maybe you should built up potential pairings between certain characters, see how readers react and how it feels to you and then go on from that.

Honestly I can't help but see the Mane Six fighting over a boy to be a very funny sight. But that's just my opinion.

Also my advice for FiER is to read/watch stories focus on the bond between mother and child that might help you out a bit.

I find this story rather interesting hope the second chapter comes in soon.

The pase is not so srush, just a little, the story is written whithout the minimum amount of detail, you assume that we know a lot of thinks, and even if we do, you should write the story as if we don't know anything at all, try to explain thoughts procceses, inert opinions, etc. but the story has potential, although it needs to be a large one, good luck.

I like this fic here!^_^

I don't know if you're taking suggestions or not but I really, really, really hope you make Sunset a fillyfooler(lesbian) in this fic.

Maybe pair her with Tenten.

Way that could work out is if Tenten found out any kids she had with Neji would be given the slave brand of the clan and that could cause her to break it off with him and look elsewhere.

Maybe where she looked could be at Sunset, and then Tenten could date her too.

5536567 the story is Naruto/Sunset for now, but there could possibly be some expansion later on...

This is off to a GREAT start! I really enjoyed this first chapter/prologue. So Sunny is in the Shinobi World eh? Wonder what this'll lead to? Will she learn any jutsu? And if she does, will she use it for good, or evil purposes? THAT is the main question. Either way, I hope that this story is updated soon cause I can see great potential!

Well let hope she dosnt get tooo metaly traumatized here......Ahh who am I kiddng she is going to get mind fucked

its ok or the 2 mentioned stories and good job on this chapter of the story im reading and can you put on fanfiction?. thanks