Just from looking at the title I thought one of my stories had been added to a group, which has been a rare occurrence since I started writing, but all I care about is that my stories are getting read.
This is beyond pleasing. The dark atmosphere of Lily's background is lifted by her merry facade, making this a very enjoyable read.
Beginning thrusted me into heavy, thick aura. Then, mare's arrival - something desperate, tragic. Next, as I said, the atmosphere is lifted, but in an interesting way. When I still see her miserable position in the world, sometimes I can't help but smile at her steadfast, pleasant behaviour. That attitude is what, in the first moment, cheers you up only to become the sign of something irreversible, role that took place of her personality.
Overall, the story is a good read and has the possibility of becoming something I would gladly return to many times.
Shit Shit Shit... He must be good at bluffing, hes a dirty rotten reporter. Surly he wont have a slip of the tongue that will get him in a world of shit. Oh he is so boned.
This is what passes for literature these days on Fimfic? Jesus Christ what is this place coming to.
Just from looking at the title I thought one of my stories had been added to a group, which has been a rare occurrence since I started writing, but all I care about is that my stories are getting read.
welll sir i need moar
*Licks lips* Oh yeah, I like. I wanna see how this turns out.
This fic gets like 10 times better if you read it while imagining Lavender Sky as a giant sentient crayloa crayon. I mean it fits perfectly.
This is beyond pleasing.
The dark atmosphere of Lily's background is lifted by her merry facade, making this a very enjoyable read.
Beginning thrusted me into heavy, thick aura. Then, mare's arrival - something desperate, tragic. Next, as I said, the atmosphere is lifted, but in an interesting way. When I still see her miserable position in the world, sometimes I can't help but smile at her steadfast, pleasant behaviour. That attitude is what, in the first moment, cheers you up only to become the sign of something irreversible, role that took place of her personality.
Overall, the story is a good read and has the possibility of becoming something I would gladly return to many times.
Well, this will be an awkward interview...
this story is getting real good, real fast.
cant wait for more!
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The first chapter was converted from first-person. Obviously I missed one >.<
This fic would be so much better if we placed the main character with a crayon.
Shit Shit Shit...
He must be good at bluffing, hes a dirty rotten reporter. Surly he wont have a slip of the tongue that will get him in a world of shit. Oh he is so boned.
5448596 Lily is the name of one of the main characters from Loyal's, 'A Different Kind of Love' series. (Which is 100% worth a read, btw)
Well well this is going to be interesting. Like a champion fisherman you've hooked me again Loyal.
I donĀ“t know if you were told already, but first you call the Mistress Moonglow, but then changed to Moonbeam. you might want to correct this.
Besides that there are just some minor typos. You got my interest.
NightmareShredder