David "The Hurricane" Schneider is a human living in Equestria. He earned his nickname by being ejected into Equestria during one of its worst hurricanes in centuries.
They’re not as colorful and [nine] of them have wings or horns”
Huh, I wasn't aware that we have nine horses with wings or horns. [None] What a difference one letter can make! Also, the characters need to have flaws, vices, imperfections. Like Spitfire has jealousy/ control issues, is a slob when it comes to maintaining her personal space, and lazy. Dave's pretty much a blank slate when it comes to his flaws, vices, imperfections. Given that he's supposed to be military, I could definitely see gambling, smoking, drinking and womanizing. But, that's just my suggestion for him as a character. Feel free to exceed my expectations and give him completely unexpected flaws, vices, imperfections.
5433335 Thanks for the heads up. My mom is yelling at me for that (she's an english teacher ) What you said is true. The characters do have flaws however, Dave's problems are none of the above, he has a much deeper issue at hand. (leaving you hanging until the next chapter) oh and btw, I'm military and I don't smoke, drink, or gamble. (I didn't say anything about womanizing though. I do have my charms, which won me that heart of a lovely Aussie lass )
5448619 Funny thing actually. My mom is a well distinguished English teacher. Works with kids with severe behavioral disorders from all over RI. I stayed with her and my dad over the holidays.
So I'm assuming Mr. Author is from new England, what with Hurricane being from New England, and Luna taking Taylor to Gillette Stadium in his dreams... And to that I say this... Please make one human a Dolphins fan like me lol
Ensign. That’s a Naval Officer rank, though. O-1. I’d thought you’d give him an Air Force officer rank (of course, every branch apart from the Navy has the same names for Officers)
Very good, can't wait for more.
Huh, I wasn't aware that we have nine horses with wings or horns. [None] What a difference one letter can make! Also, the characters need to have flaws, vices, imperfections. Like Spitfire has jealousy/ control issues, is a slob when it comes to maintaining her personal space, and lazy. Dave's pretty much a blank slate when it comes to his flaws, vices, imperfections. Given that he's supposed to be military, I could definitely see gambling, smoking, drinking and womanizing. But, that's just my suggestion for him as a character. Feel free to exceed my expectations and give him completely unexpected flaws, vices, imperfections.
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Thanks for the heads up. My mom is yelling at me for that (she's an english teacher )
What you said is true. The characters do have flaws however, Dave's problems are none of the above, he has a much deeper issue at hand. (leaving you hanging until the next chapter)
oh and btw, I'm military and I don't smoke, drink, or gamble. (I didn't say anything about womanizing though. I do have my charms, which won me that heart of a lovely Aussie lass )
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Funny thing actually. My mom is a well distinguished English teacher. Works with kids with severe behavioral disorders from all over RI. I stayed with her and my dad over the holidays.
Then she kissed me, tenderly, her breathing slower and calm as a sunset in summer.
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So I'm assuming Mr. Author is from new England, what with Hurricane being from New England, and Luna taking Taylor to Gillette Stadium in his dreams... And to that I say this... Please make one human a Dolphins fan like me lol
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Ensign. That’s a Naval Officer rank, though. O-1. I’d thought you’d give him an Air Force officer rank (of course, every branch apart from the Navy has the same names for Officers)